User talk:Tcgasdia/sandbox

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I'm an online ambassador for your WMST 250: Women, Art, and Culture (2014 Q3) class and have just stopped by to provide a quick review and add what I hope will be helpful comments.

You've done a nice job on your article and have an interesting subject. The article uses reliable sources and most of the content is tagged with a citation.

Some suggestions are: That's all. Otherwise, it looks like a great article to me! I'll be watching this page and your sandbox page for any updates. You can also "ping" me (just type "" as you see it) to your message on this page or leave a message on my talk page. Happy editing!-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 19:48, 2 November 2014 (UTC)
 * The background content is a little confusing. Part of it - who her father was and that she didn't live with him is in the introduction. I'm assuming her mother died when she was young. She lived with her sisters - at her aunt's house? Is White Cross in White Castle / vice versa? Where is Strawberry Place? It may be that all that's needed is a segue or to combine some of the thoughts. Perhaps Grandma Moses or Hilda Carline would be helpful - for examples of someone unusual backgrounds.
 * A claim like "the first "historical Gothic Melodrama" written by a female to be performed" should be attributed to someone - I'm guessing the author of the source, John Franceschina. It's nice that you've got a list of some of her works.