User talk:Teeeeeffany/sandbox

Hi, Jessica! Here are my comments! 1. Lead Section 1. Since you chose to add a subsection, make sure that you add to the lead section that your content will appear later in the article 2. Since otherwise the article was pre-existing, there is no other notes to comment the lead section; just make sure to add your information as part of the “summary” component-this may require additional reformatting 2. Article 1. Pre-existing article 2. Content is unbiased and pertinent to the title of the page 3. References 1. Each statement is cited multiple times, with a variety of reliable sources 2. Some dates are missing from the references as flagged by wikipedia in the sandbox (2,3,5,8,9,10) 4. Existing Article 1. The new section does fill in missing information from the original article 2. I do wonder, since indirect solar desalination is mentioned in the methods section, is there a way to better link the two sections? Does the explanation provided in methods of indirect solar desalination not need to be there?-should the two be combined? 3. Should the direct and indirect sections be subsections of the methods section?

Daria Zaytseva Feedback
Hi Jessica, I think the previous reviewer did a great job reviewing your sandbox. I think you did an excellent job with the wikipedia. There is nothing I can add. Just beware of how you put the "references" into the article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by DariaZaytseva (talk • contribs) 00:58, 10 December 2020 (UTC)