User talk:Templeannicao/sandbox

1. First, what does the article-draft do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? - I find this article/draft to be rather interesting and I would like to read more about it. I like how the draft successfully condensed the information in the original article so that it did not seem too wordy. I enjoyed what was added about the the finger foods mentioned in casual celebrations. I feel the same in regards to the article about dietary foods. I did not know that resistant starch existed and I found that to be rather interesting. I would like to know more about that.

2. Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic? - In all honesty, nothing seemed unnecessary or off-topic.

3. Does the article focus too much on negative or positive information? Explain. - All of this information seems to lean more towards informative and less towards "positive or negative" information. It seemed completely unbiased.

Remember, neutral doesn't mean "the best positive light" or "the worst, most critical light." It means a clear reflection of various aspects of a topic.

4. Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view?Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors? - This article does not seem completed enough to draw any conclusions. It is solely informative.

5. Are there any changes you would suggest the author apply to the article? Why? - In all honesty, I would just add more to what you already have. More information would be great.

6. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! - My article is about food deserts so I don't think it has as much to do with this.

Rachel Washington Tui81524 (talk) 15:45, 28 October 2019 (UTC)

Thank you for your advice!

Anni CaoTempleannicao (talk) 04:13, 4 November 2019 (UTC)