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I chose to read the Wikipedia article titled, "Barack Obama on Social Media," since I was interested in the ways that political candidates can use various social media platforms in order to spread their ideas and gain support from the public. This was a pretty neutral article that was aimed to be more informative, giving equal importance and length to sections about Twitter, Facebook, Reddit, and Obama’s official website. In analyzing it, I realized that this article was semi-unreliable. Information about Obama’s strategies were interesting, but there were a few obvious mistakes since not all of the facts seemed true and there was a lot of irrelevant information. First of all, there were many distractions including spelling errors (“Organised” instead of “Organized,” “Three Milllions” instead of “Three Million,” and “Complementary” instead of “Complimentary”). As well as two sentences in a row stating the same thing, just worded differently. Also, the article stated that exactly “400,000 articles were written in blogs. 400,000 videos that supported Obama were posted into YouTube,” which seemed to be more of an approximation than exact numbers. Another worrying thing about this article was that not all of the material was relevant on the page. In reading the “Talk” section, I found out that there used to be a part about Kanye West in the twitter section of this article that had just been taken out last year. In this section, commenters were also complaining that there were too many statistics that could have been condensed as well as someone else trying to change the topic of the article altogether by adding facts Obama’s Blackberry usage, when the article is about social media services, not devices. A few sentences didn’t have any references, but in double-checking the reference section overall, I noticed that there were independent sources, but there were also official news sites, like Huffington Post, the New York Times and podcast news sites, as well as books, blog posts, Obama’s twitter, sites tracking other popular twitter users, and a few stating: “page not found” and “cannot find server.” One reference didn’t even have to do with the blog post! It was a Huff Post article titled “Brittany Spears is Twitter Queen: Ashton Kutcher Loses His Top Spot.” I could not find whether this page was part of Wiki Projects, or its rating, but I would definitely rate it as “Start” or “Stub,” since it needs a lot of work before it is credible. The Wikipedia posts differ from our class discussions since we can see the references where the information is coming from right in front of us, as well as being less of a discussion interaction. I am glad that we read from official articles and books for class, since I’m less likely to question whether facts are credible. Terir (talk) 18:33, 7 September 2017 (UTC) Terir (talk) 07:19, 14 September 2017 (UTC)terir

Choosing Possible Topics
In looking up Wikipedia articles related to Arab Spring, I noticed that there were two articles I was interested in more than the rest since they pertained specifically to women and the aftermath of the Arab Spring.

Article Title: Arab Winter Article Link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Arab_Winter What I Would Add or Improve: -how the Arab Spring turned into the Arab Winter- what events and conflicts unfolded -more in depth on economic impact of the Arab Winter -in "Migrant Crisis" section, name specific cities that the refugees are going to across the Mediterranean sea

Article Title: Women in the Arab Spring Article Link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Women_in_the_Arab_Spring What I Wold Add or Improve: -create a Wikipedia biography page about the key female leader in Libya, Salwa Bugaighis -expand on the "Female Activists and Leaders" in Libya since there are only two women mentioned -Also expand on "Female Activists and Leaders" in Yemen since there is only one woman mentioned -particular protests that the women were leaders of- definitely name and describe protests, government backlash against the women, or other consequences of being a female activist on this topic

Working in Groups
Lisa, Daisy, and I will be using my sandbox in order to add to and edit the article we chose.

Hi Terri, I have also copied your sandbox link so I can easily retrieve any updates or changes that we have made for our group project.

Possible Additions to "Women in the Arab Spring"
This article is missing some key "Female Activists and Leaders" who were involved. I would expand on influential women in Yemen and Libya since there are only one or two women mentioned in these categories, as well as rights in Morocco and Egypt. Also, I would expand on these other countries and their protests in which women were leaders. Talking about government backlash against the women, or other struggles as well as the support behind being a female activist on this topic.

Here are some reliable sources I will be utilizing to make these additions possible. Bibliography:

Ãakmak, Cenap. The Arab Spring, Civil Society, and Innovative Activism. Palgrave Macmillan, 2017.

Arbatli, Ekim, and Dina Rosenberg. Non-Western Social Movements and Participatory Democracy: Protest in the Age of Transnationalism. Springer International Publishing, 2017.

Olimat, Muhamad. Handbook of Arab Women and Arab Spring: Challenges and Opportunities. Routledge, 2014. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Terir (talk • contribs) 22:24, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

Adding to an Article Outline
Outline of what’s missing from the current form of “Women in the Arab Spring”

Women from different countries Egyptian women Moroccan women’s rights Contribution to change in the region Women’s roles as leaders Women’s roles as politicians Participation is limited Women’s roles as victims Didn’t benefit from sacrifices Terir (talk) 21:09, 15 October 2017 (UTC)terir

Adding to an Article: Women in the Arab Spring Draft
Adding to Background In the years leading up to the Arab Spring, there had been an authoritarian form of government, but these nations intended to make more comprehensive political frameworks that depended on the rule of law and accountable governance. Tunisia, Egypt, and Libya faced this distinctly. In Tunisia, a Revolution was taking place and the people from neglected rural areas were holding demonstrations. These protesters were able to find a common cause which empowered them to start a labor movement that was direct it towards the capital. In Egypt, uprisings were composed by urbane and cosmopolitan people all throughout cities. Meanwhile, in Libya, ragtag groups of armed rebels in the eastern regions touched off the challenges, uncovering the tribal and territorial differences that have affected the nation for a considerable length of time. In spite of the fact that they shared a common call for personal dignity and responsive government, the upsets over these three nations reflected economic grievances and social progression. Women from all encompassing nations have taken the path to challenge the transgressions of their countries. This is particularly apparent during the anti-regimes in Tunisia, Egypt and Libya. Daisygmendez (talk) 22:36, 17 October 2017 (UTC)DaisyMendez

At this time, women’s political participation was expanding greatly compared to before. They were participating in anti-government demonstrations and protection of their rights for higher education. They even established a higher education system. Egyptian women have a history of being active members of trade unions, organizations, informal networks, and online communities. Even though there are only a few women in politics in Egypt, those involved have advanced activism. Social media has enabled women to be able to contribute to demonstrations as organizers, journalists, and political activists. Arab women played a key role in changing the views of many. They were important revolutionists during the Arab Spring, but since expanding their roles and participation was not a priority for other revolutionary forces, they ended up sacrificing a lot with no gain in the end. Terir (talk) 21:16, 15 October 2017 (UTC)terir

This portion is to add to the section: Cyberactivism and social media Social media plays a key role for women in Tunisia while they face political issues. The internet has become an alternative way for women to defend their rights and also women’s mobilization. Having access to the internet has helped women in Tunisia become more visible to the pubic, they have utilized social networks such as Facebook to promote women’s movements. In this space they are able to express their issues and allow their actions to be known. Even though the country is heavy on internet filtering and press censorship, information and communications technology and social networks have help mobilize the push for political change. A prime example is the fall of Ben Ali’s regime, even though the battle was won in the streets a big part of the Tunisian revolution was due to the support of information and communications technology. Tunisian women took part of the fall of Ben Ali’s on January 14, 2011 by engaging in unions, marches, demonstrations, and their activism done on social networks. Another blog that became viral was by Lina Ben Mhenni. Her blog, A Tunisian Girl was also talked about on the blogs of many other women. With Mhenni’s courage and bravery she was able to cover the battle in the western Tunisia. Mhenni was awarded in 2011 the Deutsche Welle International Blog Award and El Mundo’s International Journalism.

Garc liz (talk) 05:31, 17 October 2017 (UTC)

This portion is to add to the section: Female leaders and activists (under Egypt) Aliaa Magda Elmahdy: internet activist and women's rights advocate

Aliaa Magda Elmahdy In 2011 Aliaa Magda Elmahdy was kidnapped in Egypt. She was kidnapped because she uploaded nude photographs of herself online with the caption, “Sharia is not a constitution” painted on her body. Elmahdy protests in this form to give the idea that women are not able to own their body. Women's bodies are public property and others decide what to do with them.

Peer Review (Sara Park)
I like the topic of your article! I'm looking forward to where your group takes this topic. A couple general recommendations:

-Overall, the article loses credibility because of the lack of certain dates, events and their locations, and citations for these events. For example, in the first paragraph: "Following quite a while of imbued dictatorship, these nations intended to make more comprehensive political frameworks that depend on the control of law and responsible administration." Parts like "quite a while" are subjective, and can easily be replaced with years of how long the dictatorship was. It would be helpful to add the name of the regime that held authoritarian power during this time.

-For the second sentence in the "Adding to Background" portion, there's no verb in the sentence: "This particularly amid the counter administration uprisings in Tunisia, Egypt and Libya."

-In the second paragraph, sentences like "They even established a higher education system." is vague; if you found an article that states the name of a school, where it was founded, and by whom, etc, this sentence would add value to your article.

-The vocabulary also sounds colloquial, so read through and make sure your sentences are more encyclopedic. For example: "During history, Egyptian women were active members of trade unions, organizations, informal networks, and online communities." The "during history" part should be replaced for a more specific and professional opener. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sarapark (talk • contribs) 01:24, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Final Draft of what we added to Wikipedia in "Women in the Arab Spring"
INTRO At this time, women’s political participation was expanding greatly compared to before. They were participating in anti-government demonstrations and the protection of their rights for higher education by establishing a higher education system. Egyptian women have had a history of being active members of trade unions, organizations, informal networks, and online communities. Even though there are only a few women in politics in Egypt, those involved have advanced activism. Women's involvement in the Arab Spring went beyond direct participation in the protests to include cyberactivism. Social media has enabled women to be able to contribute to demonstrations as organizers, journalists, and political activists.[7]Arab women played a key role in changing the views of many. They were important revolutionists during the Arab Spring, and many activists hoped the Spring would boost women's rights, but its impact has not matched expectations. Women face discrimination in the Arab world and since expanding their roles and participation was not a priority for other revolutionary forces, they ended up sacrificing a lot with no gain in the end.[8] Islamist parties have risen to power in states that experienced changes of government, and some view their power as a major threat to women's status.

BACKGROUND In the years leading up to the Arab Spring, there had been an authoritarian form of government. These nations intended to make more comprehensive political frameworks that depended on the rule of law and accountable governance. Tunisia, Egypt, and Libya faced this distinctly. In Tunisia, a Revolution was taking place, and the people from neglected rural areas were holding demonstrations. These protesters were able to find a common cause which empowered them to start a labor movement that was direct it towards the capital. In Egypt, uprisings composed of urban and cosmopolitan people all throughout cities. Meanwhile, in Libya, ragtag groups of armed rebels in the eastern regions touched off the challenges, uncovering the tribal and territorial differences that have affected the nation for a considerable length of time. In spite of the fact that they shared a joint call for personal dignity and responsive government, the upsets over these three nations reflected economic grievances and social progression. Women of all-encompassing countries have taken the path to challenge the transgressions of their countries. This being particularly apparent during the anti-regime in Tunisia, Egypt, and Libya.

CYBERACTIVISM AND SOCIAL MEDIA Social media plays a key role for women in Tunisia while they face political issues. The internet has become an alternative way for women to defend their rights and also women’s mobilization. Having access to the internet has helped women in Tunisia become more visible to the public, they have utilized social networks such as Facebook to promote women’s movements. In this space they are able to express their issues and allow their actions to be known. Even though the country is heavy on internet filtering and press censorship, information and communications technology and social networks have help mobilize the push for political change. A prime example is the fall of Ben Ali’s regime, even though the battle was won in the streets a big part of the Tunisian revolution was due to the support of information and communications technology. Tunisian women took part of the fall of Ben Ali’s on January 14, 2011 by engaging in unions, marches, demonstrations, and their activism done on social networks. Another blog that became viral was by Lina Ben Mhenni. Her blog, A Tunisian Girl was also talked about on the blogs of many other women. With Mhenni’s courage and bravery she was able to cover the battle in the western Tunisia. Mhenni was awarded in 2011 the Deutsche Welle International Blog Award and El Mundo’s International Journalism. [40]

FEMALE LEADERS AND ACTIVISTS- EGYPT Aliaa Magda Elmahdy: internet activist and women's rights advocate[45] In 2011 Aliaa Magda Elmahdy was kidnapped in Egypt. She was kidnapped because she uploaded nude photographs of herself online with the caption, “Sharia is not a constitution” painted on her body. Elmahdy protested in this form to give the idea that women are not able to own their body. Women's bodies are public property and others decide what to do with them. [46] — Preceding unsigned comment added by Terir (talk • contribs) 04:54, 22 November 2017 (UTC)