User talk:Terrycrewsleftpeck/sandbox

Hey! I just wanted to say I reviewed your sandbox and I am very impressed with the amount of story detail you have included in your description. In terms of how you present it, I would suggest that you revise your word choice to seem less conversational. Some sentences are worded in a manner that would suggest the reader already knows the story, which is not always the case. Otherwise, it's a great contribution to Wikipedia. I understand you have minimal internet resources to support your article so it must be considerably difficult. Keep editing Terrycrewsleftpeck! Catherine.duncan (talk) 03:48, 4 April 2019 (UTC)