User talk:Tgb005/sandbox

Peer review
The topic that was chosen is very interesting, I wonder why it doesn't have an article. Anyways, I like the conciseness of the article, it doesn't mean to be too long. This would have made it tedious to read. I believe that history would be better represented at the beginning of the article, rather than tacked on at the bottom, where it doesn't seem to flow with the overall article. I don't know if you're aware but in the training modules it said that they're special guidelines and rules when it comes to medicine and medical related articles. I don't know the details, but I'd double check them to make sure that there aren't any violations. Overall the article is good. Areeb227 (talk) 04:01, 10 May 2019 (UTC)Areeb227

Peer Review: Lithere
Hello guys, I think this is where I leave the peer review? Hopefully you guys get this.

The article hits most of the main points an average reader would want to know about the drug and presents the information in easy-to-understand yet academic language. The stance is neutral, the citations are neutral sources. Everything is relevant, nothing too distracting. The m and n stuff in the first paragraph in "Chemical Structure" isn't super well explained and can probably be removed since it's not crucial to understanding - just say it's polymerized with different numbers of sucrose and iron (III) hydroxide molecules. Move the dosage stuff from "Chemical structure" to "Medical Use". Also, citation 6 appears to be broken.

One thing to keep in mind is that past tense should be avoided if possible... for instance, "These patients experienced an increase in their hemoglobin levels of at least 20 g/L" should be "patients experience an increase...". Present tense will make facts sound more sure and credible; if you want to attribute a fact specifically to a paper, maybe say: "A (year) study by so-and-so found that...". You want your facts to sound universal, not like it's from one source (even if it is).

Like the review above, I would check Wikipedia's policies about citing medical papers... I know my team got in trouble with Wiki editors for it, something about how you're not supposed to use primary sources. I'm not certain on the details.

In general, great topic and good progress!

Lithere (talk) 06:46, 12 May 2019 (UTC)Lithere

Peer Review: KANETHECAT
Overall I think this is really cool! The only thing I would add is some images of the structure of the molecule and what it looks like from the naked eye. The chemistry portion contains a good amount of information, but the imagery to understand some of it is lacking. Also, can it be bought, or does it have to be prescribed? PLus a disclaimer to not use this as medical advice might be good too.