User talk:ThatWriterWithBangs/sandbox

Article Draft Feedback
Ready to go! Chronophoto (talk) 01:04, 20 February 2018 (UTC) (course instructor)
 * Good job indicating what already exists. The new content looks great. Nice infobox and filmography table.
 * When you move the material over to mainspace little by little, make sure to fix the references so that there are no errors.

Peer review
Overall, great job of giving a full picture of who the filmmaker is! Great job with keeping the article neutral.

The organization is off to a good start but some things can be rearranged. I would add is to further separate personal/early life from projects under the biography section. Where you wrote that "Jill directed Thirteen Conversations…" under biography belongs more under career. You wrote of personal stories of Sprecher's hardships under Career that belonged more under a personal life section. You disused Sprecher's use of personal experiences under career when it better fits under the style section.

I found that most of your references are listed as external links as opposed to references and your one listed reference is actually just an added external link.

I would suggest that you refer to the Jill Sprecher throughout the article by her last name.

Also, there are a lot of commas where there does not need to be! Wt12345 (talk) 22:04, 25 February 2018 (UTC)