User talk:The Grey Lady Library Ghost/sandbox

Hello,

You chose a fascinating topic for your article comparison! You’ve persuaded me to read these articles.

In your “compare and contrast” section, you mention that your articles do not cite the same influential games. While some of this may be due to Britannica’s broader scope, I was wondering what criteria each article uses to determine influence (for example, unit sales).

In your “assessment” section, you contrast similar statements made by each source. While it is difficult to format in proper writing styles on wikipedia, I think these can be reworked slightly. Neither needs to be in bold or italics. As I recall (but please double check with purdue or another authoritative source) a quote only needs to be italicized if it is four lines or more. If it is over four lines, it is indented, italicized, and quotation marks are omitted. It may be worthwhile to breakdown your leading sentence that states “For example here are two quotes from the article taking about the same game. The first one is from Britannica the second is from Wikipedia.” And instead introduce Britannica, and between your quotes, give a short sentence introducing the wikipedia quote. Each of these could be cited like in MLA (parathenical citations) or the inclusion of a footnote.

Pshar (talk) 15:19, 19 November 2012 (UTC)

Hey Lauren, Great topic! It never even occured to me that there would be an article on this but of course there are a lot of passionate gamers out there. You gave a lot of good information as to the differences between these two articles although I was left wondering if you had a clear preference betwen them. Stephen mentioned the wiki formatting and I'd like to add that there is a function for long quotes called "blockquote" that will sort that out. Your further reading articles are really intriguing and it seems like you've thought more about the social aspects and consequences of FPS's. I liked that you pointed out the lack of discussion on violence even though it's such an integral part of these games.

Tim Yale 15:14, 25 November 2012 (UTC) Tim - you can use the four tilde to sign your posts Libringreen (talk) 01:24, 4 December 2012 (UTC)

Awesome detailed feedback here! Thanks for posting ! Libringreen (talk) 01:24, 4 December 2012 (UTC)