User talk:Thedopestdope123/sandbox

A lot of these words have wiki links to make it easier for youKvalentin1 (talk) 01:37, 8 April 2014 (UTC) Some rephrasing of the intro will make it flow betterKvalentin1 (talk) 01:37, 8 April 2014 (UTC) I think you can separate the last section even further. You have some symptoms as well as some of the mechanism listedKvalentin1 (talk) 01:37, 8 April 2014 (UTC) Starryheaven1988 (talk) 17:38, 8 April 2014 (UTC)
 * A lot of information has been collected.
 * Better organization is needed.
 * Other Wikipedia page could be linked in the introduction part.
 * How the mechanisms lead to the symptoms? How is the severity of different symptoms?
 * Is any new research progress on ADP ?

-Nice Topic! -need a little more organization regarding setting up individual sections for each of the causes, mechanisms, diagnosis, symptoms and treatments...etc -Intro needs to further be organized, information could be displaced to other sections. - I liked the information you presented here... I just feel you need to move things around to make the article flow easier. - You can embed links within your terminology (Wiki has nice ones!) and use a better organization for references. Mdgeorge85 (talk) 18:39, 8 April 2014 (UTC)

Sweiner02 (talk) 22:32, 8 April 2014 (UTC)
 * I'm a little concerned that you haven't even started to structure this page properly at this point. It's hard for me to even tell what you have and haven't included the way things are jumbled up without headings, structure, or format.
 * This honestly feels more like an outline than an article at this point. This is not where you should be by rough draft. I don't feel like there is much specific feedback I can offer you.
 * There is some good information here, just work on putting it in format and fleshing it out.


 * Akshay I think you did a good job gathering the information used in this article but the following things are missing:
 * Structure
 * Intext citation
 * You also need to link some of the words used in this article
 * I did not see the reference section, I think you need to add the reference section by typing ==Reference== and right below the reference you can type reflist with two brackets before and after. I think you will be able to see all you sources displayed at the reference sectionMohammed Tofa (talk) 22:38, 8 April 2014 (UTC)