User talk:Thegreatjizo

Your submission at Articles for creation: Kagawa Ryo (May 20)
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 Onel 5969  TT me 13:33, 20 May 2016 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Kagawa Ryo (May 20)
 Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Onel5969 was:

Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.


 * If you would like to continue working on the submission, go to Draft:Kagawa Ryo and click on the "Edit" tab at the top of the window.
 * If you need any assistance, you can ask for help at the [//en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia:WikiProject_Articles_for_creation/Help_desk&action=edit&section=new&nosummary=1&preload=Template:Afc_decline/HD_preload&preloadparams%5B%5D=Draft:Kagawa_Ryo Articles for creation help desk] or on the [//en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User_talk:Onel5969&action=edit&section=new&nosummary=1&preload=Template:Afc_decline/HD_preload&preloadparams%5B%5D=Draft:Kagawa_Ryo reviewer's talk page].
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 Onel 5969  TT me 13:34, 20 May 2016 (UTC)

Ryo Kagawa
Hello User:Thegreatjizo, I have moved your updated draft on Ryo Kagawa to the article space while working on cleanup of a category of Japanese folk singers. I noticed that you may have used some translated content from the Japanese Wikipedia to create the page. If that's the case, please feel free to go ahead and remove the template at the top of the article, but please follow the directions in the expanded template and add the new text listed there to the top of the talk page if that's the case, in order to maintain copyright compliance.

Also, for formatting reasons it seems like it would be better to reduce the amount of bracketing on the page. You might like this because it will allow you to use slightly more Japanese text. I would suggest using some form of Template:Nihongo for the discography at the bottom of page and the song titles in the running text. And welcome to Wikipedia! Dekimasu よ! 15:54, 5 June 2016 (UTC)