User talk:Thekevanator/sandbox

Hey, nice work on your article so far. It seems like you've collected a good list of new facts and stats to add to the article and that you've found good sources for them. My only suggestion is that you include a little bit more depth of information like the dates and places where events occur. This also applies to some of the facts that are already included in the article. Try to give the article overall a more wp:encyclopedic tone so that it doesn't just provide a reference for facts but starts becoming something easy and engaging to read. I like that you're organizing the information by "track and field career" and "football career" sections. I think the next step once you're done organizing the new information will be to incorporate it with the current version of article. I noticed that the article already has some information about his football career and I suggest that you think about how to reorganize it as you incorporate your additions. Good work so far and I'm really looking forward to seeing how your article develops further!

Groceryheist (talk) 01:58, 25 January 2021 (UTC)

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Hi ! I just peer reviewed your article; great work! Brierbach (talk) 20:34, 31 January 2021 (UTC)

Comment on Peer Reviews
Hey. It's been awesome to see you continue making progress on your article. You have received helpful peer reviews from (peer review),  ( peer review), and  ( peer review). I strongly encourage you to take their comments seriously as you make your next round of improvements to your article. In particular, I urge you to consider and 's comments about sourcing for his High School achievements and records. I also think that it's important for you to merge your ***Career*** section with the ***Personal*** section in the original article so that instead of a list of events and times the section is written in complete sentences. Finally, 's suggestion to add information about sponserships seems like a great idea. Overall, I think that the images you added are fantastic and so is the background section that you've added. I think you're on track to make this a truly great contribution to Wikipedia. Reach out to me when you've had a chance to incorporate the suggestions from your peer reviewers. Groceryheist (talk) 19:59, 3 February 2021 (UTC)