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US Quidditch
US Quidditch

This article is mainly in need of better cohesion and references. The statements in the lead paragraph and History sections have very little flow, with bad grammar, poorly worded (sometimes confusing sentences), and almost no references. I would recommend rewriting both sections and finding a credible source to cite.

Thend15 (talk) 18:25, 6 February 2015 (UTC)


 * Approved. Why doesn't it say that the game is inspired by Harry Potter? Josef Horáček (talk) 18:42, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/2000_in_video_gaming Thend15 (talk) 18:36, 9 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Approved. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:21, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

Article missing a lead
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Ohio_University_Marching_110

The article is well structured despite it's lack of a lead. It has a good balance between the points, with the history section being understandably the longest. It's layed out in a logical order, and seems to flow well. All it's really missing is an introduction/lead. Thend15 (talk) 05:07, 25 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Your lead is short but sufficient. Revise this sentence: "The nickname Marching 110 is a reference to the band's original number of members, and now is consists of 245 members." You should break it into two sentences and give the second sentence a proper subject. Josef Horáček (talk) 03:37, 1 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Nice work. Josef Horáček (talk) 12:30, 10 March 2015 (UTC)