User talk:Thenightmancometh/sandbox

Peer Review 11/20
Overall I am able to understand many aspects of Terazzo much more thoroughly with these additions. You have expanded the history section substantial and it adds much to the entry as a whole. I did not notice any grammatical or stylistic errors at first glance. The following are suggestions to further strengthen and clarify your additions:

1. You reference briefly the precedent of mosaics in ancient Egypt. Where there no mosaic precedents in the United States? What was the material's relationship with mosaics early on? How did it come to be differentiated? In your source "Twentieth Century Building Materials," it discusses this some on page 204. Perhaps expand on this?

2. Under the Types and Systems heading I think it would be useful to define bonded and unbonded methods. You list types of each, but it is not immediately clear what distinguishes the two from one another. In those shoer few sentences you list many terms but fail to define any of them. Expanding on this could serve the article well.

3. Images: Are there any open source images of Terrazzo construction methods? Anything at all? This could clarify much of your additions to the Production section.

4. In the Deterioration section, what constitutes "replacement Terrazzo?" What makes it different? How does one go about replacing terrazzo? You very nicely lay out the mechanisms of deterioration for the material, but could elaborate more on this.

Overall, well done. Looking forward to reading more about the materials in the future.

IsntItIonic (talk) 05:05, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

Instructor comments
Indeed, well done, particularly in responding to your peer reviewer's comments. As a final cleanup task, please consider using WP:Citing sources to reduce redundant citations.

Elizabeth Linden Rahway (talk) 05:24, 28 November 2017 (UTC)