User talk:Tieler44/sandbox

COMMENTS
Nice start, Tieler. The article you have chosen seems quite good and useful to the topic. Now you will need to edit what you have into language that is appropriate to an encyclopedia entry. This means that the materials in the article you have researched that are directly related to the section in the Propaganda article you wish to edit are succinctly synthesized to improve the information in the Propaganda article. It seems as though the best place for some of what you have here (once edited) would be under the heading "Techniques." But we could discuss this more, if you like. Let me know. --Jbdolphin (talk) 06:57, 22 April 2021 (UTC)

COMMENTS
Very well written, Tieler. There was a smooth transition from propaganda in politics to propaganda in social media/internet. I would recommend refraining from the word, 'we' and other opinionated words because it can take from the neutralization of the changes you want to make. I would suggest putting (PR) behind public relations so the audience can know what the abbreviation stands for. The last sentence of the section, Organizational Propaganda on the Internet, doesn’t sound neutral. It sounds as if your opinion is present. Other than, needing to maintain your neutralization throughout the article it was really well-written! And I was able to follow along pretty smoothly. Keep up the good work! --User:eve.bw