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Tiara, the draft could use more information. Is this the right link?Cassell04 (talk) 20:39, 5 March 2021 (UTC)

Tiera, your wiki page has a very good flow of information. Not only does it have a good flow to the reader but it also does have all the information cited or reference. I like how you have the headings bolded of what information is about to be below and how it organizes the start of the information you go into detail about.

In the sentence "In 2018, ran for election in Ohio's 11th Congressional District against republican candidate Beverly Goldstein." Maybe but "In 2018 she/marcia/fudge ran for..etc.

I like how you used acronyms for long titles that way it does not look run on or jumbled up together.

She was unopposed( in a ) November 18 special election for the balance of Jones's fifth term, and won with less than 9,000 votes cast..Maybe try and use different wording here or sentence structure.

Great job so far! Looking forward to seeing the finished page.

Best,

Katelyn — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kaatiegabrielle (talk • contribs) 02:16, 16 March 2021 (UTC)