User talk:Tiff1194/sandbox

Okay, Tiffany. You outlined your readings. Now, how are you doing at drafting a few paragraphs for insertion into the main article? What elements of Skinner's work do you plan to talk about using in the classroom? Remember, the theory is too broad for you to cover all of it. You need to select just one or two elements like reinforcement, or programmed learning and provide an explanation of how we use those in applied settings. If you have questions, do not wait to ask them. PsycTeacher (talk) 18:44, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Tiffany, I have not seen any progress for several days and you did not respond to my last comment. What's up? We are coming to the finish line and we all need to cross it together. You outlined some good material. Now you need to take some element of what you have learned and write a couple of paragraphs explaining the application this theory to education. I made a more expansive comment about this on the Course Talk Page. Your work must be developed in your sandbox, in encyclopedic style, and make sense to fit into the main Skinner article. Let me know what you are doing and how I can help. We are almost out of time.PsycTeacher (talk) 14:03, 13 July 2015 (UTC)

Tiffany, You are not answering my questions regarding your apparent lack of progress on the Wikipedia project. I see no new action in your Wikipedia Sandbox. If you are working off-line, it is past time to move online and share what you are doing with the class and with me. You posted an outline of facts, but you have yet to prepare a few paragraphs to summarize some element of the theory as it applies to education. I will monitor your Wikipedia Sandbox for some progress. If you do not complete this task by the 23rd, you will likely not pass the course. What do you need?PsycTeacher (talk) 15:54, 18 July 2015 (UTC)

Tiffany, Congratulations on the new job! I was quite perplexed about what would cause an obviously intelligent and skilled individual just to stop participating. Now I know what happened.

To clarify what your content should “sound” like I refer you to the Wikipedia resources (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Training/For_students/Resources). Pay particular attention to Evaluating Wikipedia (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Evaluating_Wikipedia_brochure_%28Wiki_Education_Foundation%29.pdf) and Editing Articles on Psychology (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Editing_Wikipedia_articles_on_psychology.pdf). Compared to classmate’s work, these will be far superior as models. PsycTeacher (talk) 16:30, 20 July 2015 (UTC)

Skinner on EducationTiff1194 (talk) 04:37, 22 July 2015 (UTC)Tiff1194
Ok does this need to be longer? I feel like it could get a little redundant, especially considering there is an existing section on education. Can I change the title of the section from "Influence on Education" to "Skinner on Education" or is that rude?

I knew there was an associated section, but I could not anticipate what you would produce. If your work is substantially the same as the existing section, integrate your work into that existing work without creating an essentially duplicate section. Be absolutely certain to sign your edits (PsycTeacher (talk) 12:21, 22 July 2015 (UTC)) without the parentheses, so I can determine what is your work and what is not your work.

It is not rude to modify a section title, but that is usually undertaken after consultation with the original author and only when it improves the article. Changing it for the sake of a course assignment is not a good reason. I would leave it alone.

I will review your content today and let you know if you are ready to post. PsycTeacher (talk) 12:21, 22 July 2015 (UTC)

Final Review
Your content length is fine. The content looks good. There are some opportunities to improve clarity (see attached Grammarly.com review). You need to edit your content and use the Wikipedia Cite tool (in the edit toolbar) to add your references and citations to your content. This will not produce APA style entries, do not worry about that here. Notify me when you are ready for me to look again. PsycTeacher (talk) 13:16, 22 July 2015 (UTC)

Peer review
Hey Tiffany! Everything looks great. Like Mr. Welch said, make sure you add references within the text! Great job. Dainaloo (talk) 18:23, 22 July 2015 (UTC)

Peer Feedback
Hey Tiffany, great job on your draft! Besides adding in your references I only found a few little errors.

This sentence "Skinner maintained that people are under the control of the physical environment, however, when a greater dependency on the educator rather than the physical world is developed, educators must assist in decreasing and shifting this dependence" could possibly be broken up into 2 sentences.

"To achieve this learning environment teachers should provide positive reinforcement for effort in attendance, behavior and academic achievement, as well as effort, as though to help bridge the gap between high achievers and students that typically have had poor performance". - This sentence is also very long.

I changed a few things such as 'more ineffective' to 'less effective'

I also combined two sentences at the end of your second paragraph to make them flow a little better "Educational environments should not only reward top students and punish those that do not perform well, but instead provide positive reinforcement for individual progress of each student.  "

Overall good job! I like your specific examples that you used!

CCMcgrew (talk) 21:02, 22 July 2015 (UTC)CCMcgrew

Final Review
Not Yet. I cannot ask you to move this to the main article at this time. I am sending a summary by e-mail. PsycTeacher (talk) 15:24, 23 July 2015 (UTC)