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Nick's Peer Review of Tim's Draft on "Ethnic Cleansing" -- April 15th, 2019

Upon my first reading of Tim's draft on "Ethnic Cleansing, I noticed only one example of a weasel word, in the introduction of the "Jews in Germany" section where he uses "Recognized as". Otherwise, his work is weasel-word free. Tim used plain language and avoided awkward structure in nearly all cases. However, there are some sentences that require minor grammatical revisions, such as erroneous commas or misspellings. Tim also did a good job of making factual claims in every sentence which adds to the informative capacity, conciseness, and efficiency of his writing. Most of his sentences and claims are cited with the exception of very few, which should certainly be added prior to the final contribution to the Wikipedia article. Tim made sure to avoid attributing viewpoints to himself, rather (correctly) electing to convey the fact that the cited author/source is responsible for the claim. All of his paragraphs flow well and are completely coherent, logical, and clear. There is no additional information needed to comprehend Tim's current work, and as of now, the only revisions necessary are forgotten citations, the removal of one weasel-word introduction, and occasional grammatical errors.