User talk:Tinm923/sandbox

Lots of good info about the company history. Maybe it would be a good idea to branch out from the company and speak towards some of the local clients the forge provided for? I also think a picture of the location on Mt. Ephraim where the company used to be would fit well. Maybe some other notable employees that went on to other ventures after leaving the forge. I think there were a couple subjective words in the first paragraph, like 'great', but I think you kept it very neutral for the most part. Hopefully finding more info about the company isn't too hard to track down. (Bertbert95 (talk) 13:25, 16 April 2019 (UTC))

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You have a lot of good information about the Camden Forge. The only suggestion I would say is, if possible, explain a little more about why Camden Forge closed and also add some pictures too of the location where Camden Forge was located or the building itself. CherryBlossom918 (talk) 14:49, 22 April 2019 (UTC)

I think you've done a lot with the research you were able to come up with. One note on formatting is that the source for the list of things produced by CF should probably be located on the "Products" heading rather than on the bottom of the list. The opening section is well-written and seems ready for the main space. The second section opens with some awkward phrasing and could generally use a bit more polish. I also wonder if there's a way to work in a second source for that second section. As far as next steps: I think this topic might be exhausted, but I wonder if there's a way to look for opportunities to work CF into other pages as a means of negotiating a character reduction on the final project. Let me know if you're interested. Colbuendia71 (talk) 20:01, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

I think the article you have created is really well written and researched, and the picture you included from the company flier demonstrates how big of a company it was. The tone of the whole piece is neutral and informative, with clear sources. The only thing I could think to add would perhaps be some more links to other pages, or maybe a link to your page from the main Camden page, as the forge's page is listed as an orphan. The section of important people and the paragraph on the legal issues the company faced are smart additions as well. (Bertbert95 (talk) 01:02, 1 May 2019 (UTC))

There's not much for me to say here since you've already moved this to main space and been given an award. Great work! Colbuendia71 (talk) 17:29, 2 May 2019 (UTC)