User talk:Tlacuilx/Portland Police Bureau

Wording
Because it results from the US DOJ's investigation, it is sufficient to state that the "investigation resulted in a settlement agreement with the City of Portland." In a rare use of the English language subjunctive, "developed or revamped" should be "develop or revamp" because, while these are things that the agreement said should happen, their actual happening is uncertain. Ihiyotl (talk) 19:12, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

Content
I wouldn't focus on summarizing the clauses of the settlement. Instead, I would ask what are the things a general reading landing on this page would want to know and then address those things. For example, I would want to know what let to this investigation. As of 2021, is the settlement still in effect or has it been lifted? What impact has it had on PPB's behavior? Does it have any relationship to the civilian oversight boards in Portland? PPB didn't admit any wrongdoing, but what did the investigation find? Ihiyotl (talk) 19:16, 14 November 2021 (UTC)