User talk:Tmendo26/sandbox

Hello, my name is Rebekah McNamara. I am testing out introducing myself to you on your talk page as a part of the assigned wiki tutorial. --Rmcnamara2 (talk) 22:11, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

Taryn's Peer Review: Creeping Normality
Hi Taryn,

I appreciate the structure, layout, and systemic review of the article and I agree with your notes that the article on creeping normality needs more content and more citations. Without citations, the information is invalid and could be perceived as the author's opinion. I think the most important edits are as you mentioned, adding content and backing up the information with citations.

The paragraph about Obese and Overweight pregnant women could be a good focal point as it is confusing whether the article is talking about pregnant women who are overweight or obese. Or, if they are talking about obese women AND overweight pregnant women. The section also seems biased in that it appears to only be about women. I think what the author meant for this section was to discuss people who are obese and women who are pregnant and overweight. However, as you mentioned there is not much to support the claims made by the author. Correlation does't necessarily equal causation. The author quotes the results of a study where by participants were asked to select the desired BMI and gestational weight ranges. My point is just because someone doesn't know the answer to this question doesn't mean that obesity has become normal. There may be something more valuable to use to substantiate the claim more in your source (Wilkinson, Poad, & Stapleton, 2013).

The "Other Uses" section could be changed to "Examples" and then you could include other examples from your sources. It looks like there may be an example of creeping normality from your first source about the forrest visitors. Examples are a good way to help explain the concept.

I didn't visit all of your articles. However, they do appear to be from quality sources.

Rmcnamara2 (talk) 18:40, 18 April 2019 (UTC)