User talk:ToYouFromI/sandbox

Zx = Zeynep Df = Denise Ad = Adanna Sa = Samah

After our discussion in class and a chat with Bob from Live help, these are some of the topics requiring research we have brainstormed so far:

RIVERWOOD CONSERVANCY http://riverwoodconservancy.org/Riverwood.html

YELLOWFISH PROJECT http://yellowfishroad.org/

OPRAH WINFREY NETWORK http://news.yahoo.com/oprah-winfrey-network-lays-off-one-fifth-staff-231245957.html http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Oprah_Winfrey_Show

CATS http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cat Section on declawing and behaviour MISSING!

JUST A REMINDER When doing future brainstorms, make sure the topic is notable and various sources can be found to offer evidential support of proposed statements. If the topic is slightly controversial or if you have prior interest in the topic, please ensure that for the sake of this project, the topic can be READILY supported by balanced sources (sources offering different perspectives).

TO CLARIFY, THE ABOVE = COPY-PASTE FROM BRAINSTORM SESSION ToYouFromI (talk) 13:08, 29 March 2012 (UTC)

Hi guys, welcome to our sandbox!! Zeynep.i (talk) 23:54, 20 March 2012 (UTC)

Cats is apparently protected so we need to find a new topic. Zeynep.i (talk) 00:26, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

Here is an editable article that lacks details and does not offer balanced viewpoints: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Onychectomy Zeynep.i (talk) 00:54, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

We can make an entire page on health concerns if that helps (parasite, fleas/ ticks, urinary crystals, pimples, obestity, cancer, diabities or anything else)Kinleyde (talk) 01:05, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

I like your suggestion above Zenyep...we could do a lot on that page....maybe we should get it approved before we go all gunho with it like cats.....Kinleyde (talk) 01:10, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

Hi Denise, your suggestion is equally good! http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cancer_in_cats this article lacks too much and it is possible to add in a few subtopics to introduce i.e. types of cancer, symptoms, diagnosis, prognosis, etc. Or we can also include for declawing article subtopics in detailed procedure, more research on methods, consider alternative ethical viewpoints, include further alternatives, add more and organize "Recovery, health and behavioral effects" to make it more convenient for users to access the right information they seek. I am fine with either of these, but also open to more suggestions. At this point I am waiting for input from everyone else and once we agree on what to contribute to, we can finally get started! Zeynep.i (talk) 01:23, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

I did the treatment section and I took Zeneps suggestion and put my reference within the beginning sentance/ paragraph thing because I only utilized one reference throughout a lot of my pieces of information (this is because I found a complete veterinary guide... (so its pretty hard not to find what you are looking for) Kinleyde (talk) 23:48, 28 March 2012 (UTC) I think maybe going with the one on declawing cause as it says that the one "Cancer in Cat" its an orphan..when you look at it there no meat to it and we essentially have to build up the whole page from the start (which i percieved that we wanted to avoid completly). So maybe just to make it easier one of us can just simply handel making whats there less bias rather than going on an entire topic idea then the rest take a subtopic, therefore we are only establishing three sections which makes it really simple......Kinleyde (talk) 01:41, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

Yea it seems like a lot of work but it is actually easier to find research material on it. For instance, all we need is 4 sections divided among ourselves: 1. Signs and Symptoms, 2. Causes, 3. Diagnosis or Treatment, and 4. Prevention. Up to you guys but I think if we can each manage to write an informative section it might be useful. Still if anyone is reluctant we can always switch at this early point :) Zeynep.i (talk) 01:51, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

Actually, Denise I think your idea is pretty good. With regards to the fact that it sorphaned, I was also slightly put off by that because as you said it little to nothing substantial to work with and that might be too much for us to effectively address all the sectitons that need to be addressed. However, it also means that there are increased chances of actually finding sources to support this; so the negatives pale in comparison. In fact, I just did a quick search in google and the library catalogue and there are definitely good informational sources we can explore. We can decide on what topics to do and you have made and the suggestions you have made so far are great. You have to be completely onboard though for us to continue. I know you are interested in the general idea since you brought it up, so what do you say? :) ToYouFromI (talk) 02:29, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

Honestly I'm at the point where I don't care what we do cause I see the point that the Cancer section provides maximum opportuntiy to find information since its a blank slate yet the declawing one has aspects and all we have to do is expand on what currently there. I personally think that the Cancer one would be better since we could do something unique and there's nothing that we have to check if it's already on the wikipedia system. Kinleyde (talk) 02:53, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

Perfect! Then "Cancer in Cats" it is. YAY! First milestone accomplished ... and right on time too (it's 11pm and we have ourselves a topic :D). Is it safe to say we can start working on the outline for tomorrow? Who's doing what and whatnot? In order to ensure there's no conflict in people choosing the same sub-topics, maybe we should do that in person (?) tomorrow. Ten mnutes max?

Also, I am going through the powerpoint and I have a feeling all this information is being posted in the wrong place :/. Anyway, copy-paste was created for a reason, so we should be fine. (''' THIS REFERS TO WHEN THE INFORMATION WAS POSTED IN THE PERSONAL USER SANDBOX)

ToYouFromI (talk) 03:08, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

I wouldn't mind doing treatment/ diagnosis I think it would be interestingKinleyde (talk) 15:35, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

Sketch outline for the Cats and Cancer article. SEE LINK Outline We need to decide which ones each person will do. Any other suggested sub-areas can also be include. I am going to "claim" the article so nobody else takes it. Please get back to me as soon as possible. ToYouFromI (talk) 21:35, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

I'm just adding here does Samar know that we switched topics......she hasn't posted an answer since the switch and I don't know if anyones texted her yet (just making sure everyones in the loop). But ya I would like to do diagnosis and treatment Kinleyde (talk) 19:09, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

Reagrding Samar, she was called yesterday regarding the changes, and just like you, she was encouraged to come up with suggestions. Also Zeynep called her today. She ought to be on here soon. @Diagnosis and treatment: Great!

Research information (rough draft) is scheduled to be done by the 23rd at 12 noon (extended because of the topic change). Is that ok with everyone? If you can do more before that time, that would be great too :D. ToYouFromI (talk) 21:52, 21 March 2012 (UTC)

Ok guys I will try to cover Signs and Symptoms, and will try to create a better introduction. Zeynep.i (talk) 00:04, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

I've added temporary subheadings so please feel free to edit them to better suit your research :) Zeynep.i (talk) 01:16, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

Also, here is a significant help for referencing material: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Citing_sources Zeynep.i (talk) 01:16, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

Hey ya...I started wrting some stuff out and I'm just curious what section we are going to be putting our references...alot of the other ones actually have a reference section...but I'm unsure if thats our external links part...(just trying to confirm things before I go all gunho adding stuff outside of my little area/ section (whatever you want to call it)..Kinleyde (talk) 02:15, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

Great job Denise! I included mine in the references section but I am also a bit confused about the external links section. As for what I've done so far: I have researched and added a lot of information but I need to re-edit the whole thing, so probably will do it tomorrow morning because I am a bit exhausted. And if anyone has any suggestion for improvement on any section please feel free to edit! Good night to whoever is still online! Zeynep.i (talk) 05:32, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

What I think external links is, is just a section where you can place related topics so like I added veterinary practise....so I'm thinking once we add general ideas that are of the same category....Kinleyde (talk) 13:12, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

I think the "external links section" is to other sources that provide useful information (sometimes because they are devoted entirely to the ttopic being edited) relating to the topic for readers looking for websites with more information but they are not directly referenced in the article. Meanwhile, the reference section is for those articles directly mentioned int he article. At least, this is what I have understood by clicking on links on a few articles. Does this sort of make sense? ToYouFromI (talk) 14:00, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

CHAT EXCERPT'' : FOR ANYONE WHO IS AS CONFUSED AS I WAS

Also, I had a discussion last night with one of the wikipedian ambassadors because I has mentioned earlier that I felt these discussions ought not to be in the sandbox(?). Anyway, this is an excerpt from that chat:

[21:47]  When editing articles, are we supposed to write our brainstorms in the talk page of the designated user or in the article's talkpage.

[21:51] <+Alpha_Quadrant> NUIJL: you could write your ideas down in your own userspace

[21:51] <+Alpha_Quadrant> NUIJL: if you have a specific idea on improving an article, then you could bring it up on that article's talk page So far we have been posting our brainstorms (on what to cover for the orphaned article to improve it) most of which is general ideas and assigning of who to do what .. things like that in the sandbox. From what you have said, I understand that that is not the right place (none of that is evenencylopedic content) but where are we supposed to put this information.The designated user's talk page?

[21:59] <+Alpha_Quadrant> NUIJL: yeah, it would probably have that sort of a discussion on a user talk page ...

[22:00] <+Alpha_Quadrant> I have seen some of the other students just having a group discussion on eachother's talk pages

[22:09]  For talk page conversations, are we strongly advised to include edit summaries as with the sandbox conversations?

[22:09] <+Alpha_Quadrant> NUIJL: it just means that a group of editors work on articles in that topic area

[22:09] <+Alpha_Quadrant> NUIJL: "comment" or "reply" usually suffices on talk pages

[22:12]  Oh ok. So if the article's talk page' is for talking about in-depth discussions and research topics regarding the article as in this one: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Costa_Concordia_disaster. Doesn't this serve the same purpose as a designated uer's sandbox with regards to the information that is collected there?

[22:13] <+Alpha_Quadrant> NUIJL: well, you wouldn't want to write the actual article content there mainly, it is for just discussing possible changes

[22:13] <+Alpha_Quadrant> changes are rarely written up on the talk page

[22:16]  So let me get this straight: changes to the article are done in the desiganted user's sandbox while the article's talk page(not the designated user's) is for discussing the changes (??)

[22:17] <+Alpha_Quadrant> NUIJL: yes, or you can make the changes directly to the article

[22:17] <+Alpha_Quadrant> skipping the sandbox (WHICH DOES NOT APPLY TO US SINCE THE SANDBOX IS AN IMPORTANT PART OF THE EDIT PROCESS FOR OUR SCHOOL AS INDICATED ON THE POWERPOINT) ToYouFromI (talk) 14:00, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

I really do hope Michael Dick will respond to my message soon, it would help clarify things more maybe. I think we ought to move these conversations to a talk page (the user's) so we can do the actual article edits in here :/ToYouFromI (talk) 14:00, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

Oh and I have placed the UofT banner on that article. We should be good to go. ToYouFromI (talk) 14:19, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

According to my understanding, the designated user's (DS) Sandbox (User Page Tab) is where we will post the changes we make to the article (including references), and the DS will be responsible for copying and pasting the changes indicated in the DS Sandbox onto the article itself Cancer in cats. The DS's "talk page" (Talk tab right next to the User page tab) will be used to discuss the changes/modifications, edits, and will serve as a communication place among the group members. Zeynep.i (talk) 18:48, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

Also, Denise your part looks good but you need to add references (intext and footnotes) Zeynep.i (talk) 18:51, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

I have fixed a few grammatical errors and changed sentence structure for signs and symptoms Zeynep.i (talk) 19:20, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

Ya I've only had one reference so far, but since I've added homeotherapy I have other sources too (which I'll add later) cause I didn't get the information from a webstie but rather a book so the formula was different so I had to figure that out and it kinda fough me for a second but you'll see it as #18 Pinney.....but ya I will add the homeotherapy references later cause I think there's probably some stuff I could add so I'll look some more then just do it all at once.....Kinleyde (talk) 19:37, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

If you got most of the information from one source for a specific section, you can probably write a sentence underneath the heading (like a general thing about the section) and put a reference next to that sentence (i.e. similar format to what i did for general symptoms list) Zeynep.i (talk) 19:51, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

I have spoken with Samah and she will be working on Prevention section, and will submit her progress with references by 12pm on the 23rd. Zeynep.i (talk) 20:48, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

I have created an introduction briefly introducing the topic and outlining the contents of the article. Zeynep.i (talk) 21:12, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

Adanna, I have edited both Intro and Signs and symptoms, so please go to your sandbox and copy-paste everything from your sandbox to the main article cancer in cats. Zeynep.i (talk) 21:15, 22 March 2012 (UTC)

This is just a rough draft

Prevention

The risk of cats being diagnosed with cancer is quite small, but even so it can also be quite difficult to detect because of the cat’s ability to facade its illnesses. Lymphoma is one the most common forms of cancer that occurs in felines. It is associated with the feline leukemia virus (FeLV). Prevention of FeLV can be quite feasible as there is a vaccine for it created in 1969. A year later, in 1970, an immunofloures-cent antibody (IFA) test for the detection of FeLV in the blood of infected cats was formulated. The IFA test was used to experiment the chances of felines being exposed to cancer. The results showed that 33% of cats who were exposed to FeLV related diseases were at a higher risk for acquiring it, while the cats that were left unexposed were left unaffected. FeLV is either spread through contagion or infection and once infected it is possible for cats to stay that way for the rest of their lives.

•	Exposure Interaction with other cats with strains or diseases related to FeLV can be a great risk factor for cats attaining FeLV themselves. Therefore, keeping the affected cats in quarantine from the unaffected cats is the key to prevention. •	Vaccines Help the immune system fight off disease causing organisms, which is another key to prevention.

•	Spaying and Neutering Each time a female cat goes through heat, her risk for developing breast cancer increases. Spaying and neutering the cat will prevent the female cat from going into heat.

When a feline is diagnosed with cancer, surgery can performed to remove the cancer to prevent it from further spreading. Chemotherapy is used to destroy the cancer cells. During this process, cats may lose fur.

Eckstien, Sandy. (2012). Cancer in Cats: Types, Symptoms, Prevention, and Treatment. WedMD. Retrieved on March 22 2012.

Hardy, W.D. (1976). Prevention of the contagious spread of feline leukaemia virus and the development of leukaemia in pet cats. Nature Publishing Group. 326-328. doi:10.1038/263326a0

Nelson, Brenda. (2008). How to Prevent Cancer in Cats. Knoji. Retrieved on March 22 2012.

Samah4693 (talk) 15:20, 23 March 2012 (UTC)

Samar, thank you very much for posting this by the deadline :D. However, there are a few things I want to add. Each point is very brief (since this is a rough draft, I am sure you'ld take that into consideration when working on your final draft) and has no direct referencing. While this was supposed to be just a rough draft, the rough draft should have included the direct references for each part rather than just writing withotu refernces as you did.

I wrote up a little part on Prevention as well. I shall put up my links here and a summary of what I wrote to help you with your writing process and provide you with more information. Listed below are four of the links I used in writing on prevention, the others were journal articles from the UTL Library catalogue and I am not sure how to include those here. http://www.vitalityscience.com/v/articles/Cancer-in-Cats.htm http://articles.chicagotribune.com/2001-08-05/news/0108050255_1_skin-cancer-feline-leukemia-virus-cats-and-dogs http://www.livescience.com/7378-secondhand-smoke-cancer-pets.html http://www.cat-health-guide.org/catcancer.html

The next deadline is the 25th at 2pm  (giving you ample time between then and the 27th to finish off your rlg essay and givng those who have almost finished time to study for other courses). By the 25th, everything should be in here including correct referencing). Denise and Zeynep are very much ahead of the two of us (amazing work!); so the earlier we can finish the better.

''FOR EVERYONE: If there are any spelling, diction or grammar errors you notice as you go along, please indicate the corrections in the edit summaries and click "minor edit" when necessary. If pictures can be found to support your writing, where possible, please incude them.'' ToYouFromI (talk) 17:16, 23 March 2012 (UTC)

EDIT SUMMARY included ToYouFromI (talk) 17:19, 23 March 2012 (UTC)

CORRECTIONS REGARDING THE ACTUAL ARTICLE
I have made significant fixes in spelling, grammar, font and spacing for all sections. Still needs a bit more work. Zeynep.i (talk) 05:02, 24 March 2012 (UTC)

Should the fonts under the treatment section be italic or normal? Zeynep.i (talk) 05:04, 24 March 2012 (UTC)

Good progress Samah! Please include your progress on the designated user's sandbox. Link: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ToYouFromI/sandbox Zeynep.i (talk) 05:11, 24 March 2012 (UTC)

Hey ya sorry I havent been on recently..(work and other gross stuff) but in the book that the treatments were in there were italized....so ya in that sense I felt that to describe methodology staying true to the reference work was the best thing to do....Kinleyde (talk) 22:39, 24 March 2012 (UTC)

Guys, how do I bold words Samah4693 (talk) 02:20, 25 March 2012 (UTC)

Samah, here is a helpful guide: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Cheatsheet Also, please fix your references! Zeynep.i (talk) 03:53, 25 March 2012 (UTC)

Adanna apparently we can take screenshots of the article itself Zeynep.i (talk) 04:10, 25 March 2012 (UTC)

Samah I've sent you some instructions so please make sure you read them. And Adanna at this point you are the only one left to contribute! I understand the deadline was today a few hours ago now so guys please try to make progress sometime today so I can do some editing because my schedule is very tight. Zeynep.i (talk) 17:59, 25 March 2012 (UTC)

Samah I have made significant changes in your punctuation, changed format and removed a lot of unnecessary links. There is still much to do so please have a second look... Still no word from Adanna. Zeynep.i (talk) 19:39, 25 March 2012 (UTC)

Hey just wanna know if there's any last minute adjustments people want to do on mine, but what I would really appreciate in any way Adanna is when you do e-mail the assignment in, maybe e-mail just also so each of us has a copy of the assignment being handed in.....Also to hand in the assignment you need our student number and first, last name and our user name on wikipedia (so maybe cause I'm not confortable putting my student # out for the world to see (cause that guy at tutorial did say it was public) maybe shoot us a call or something and ill text you my number and other info...or maybe we just sort that out during tutoiralKinleyde (talk) 01:46, 26 March 2012 (UTC)

Also complete brain fart here i do have a screen shot of an earlier date before tons of changes were made (I mean Zenep did start making categories but it's not the worst thing in the world)....Kinleyde (talk) 01:49, 26 March 2012 (UTC)

Denise, I did take a screenshot before any change was made, in its most original form. I sent a copy to Adanna so she can include it in the word file, so don't worry, you will be surprised at how much we have all contributed to this whole article! Also, I agree that it would be best if Adanna sends each of us a copy of the word file before submitting. But the one thing I am confused about is how we can provide a 'printout' of the sandbox. What about the whole history of edits, etc? Should we also provide links to the pages? Zeynep.i (talk) 02:19, 26 March 2012 (UTC)

I have made significant changes in grammar, sentence structure, some references and links, and tried to improve overall flow and coherence in Research section. Adanna, I don't know what you are trying to claim by the point you made in the very last paragraph. I left that alone so you can clarify it. Zeynep.i (talk) 02:56, 26 March 2012 (UTC)

I have made Major fixes in grammar, sentence structure and punctuation in the Treatment section. I have also removed unnecessary information. Zeynep.i (talk) 04:01, 26 March 2012 (UTC)

I have made fixes in sentence structure, punctuation and grammar in the Prevention section. I have thus edited the whole article. It is incredible how I have encountered so many grammatical mistakes that could have been corrected with a simple 'second look' or a 'first edit' to the article section by the user. I am guessing none of you actually took the time to 'edit' after writing your sections. Zeynep.i (talk) 04:29, 26 March 2012 (UTC)

The merged and edited version in the sandbox has been pasted into the original article cancer in cats. If anyone has any suggestion, or opposes any of the edits I have made, please feel free to revert, but don't forget to mention the changes here as well. Also, if anyone is interested in providing relevant images please do so! Zeynep.i (talk) 04:36, 26 March 2012 (UTC)

Adanna, I notice you have added more points to your Research section. Do you think you can edit what you have added, make it precise, remove quotations that stem from personal opinion (you have something about a "link"), and ensure it remains relevant to the article? For instance, you have a sentence that reads "Cats, as with some other warm-blooded animals, certain parasite the toxoplasma gondii. " I am having a hard time making sense of this, so first and foremost, please focus on editing this whole section. We will talk more about this in class tomorrow if you decide to come, and in the meanwhile, please make sure that if you make ANY changes, mention it HERE like how I did, so we can communicate and reach the best, most rational conclusion as a group. Zeynep.i (talk) 00:39, 27 March 2012 (UTC)

I see. I haven't checked this talk page at all since we moved from the other talk page. I usually just directly edit the sandbox and tell you what I edited in the summary for dispute purposes.

So to address your questions.

Yes, I do have images that can be uploaded (you may notice that there is a protocol regarding copyrights on images when you try to upload them), we'll need to address that first.

With regards to your comments on my article, it really is in a mess. I just wrote there as I thought. I'll work on that - as much as I can -this morning.

With regards to your other comments, I will now summarise what I have done to the more-finely written parts of the article (aka all parts but my section). I made changes to the sentence structure and the flow of the sentences in the Intro section yesterday. Today, I made changes to the Signs and Symptoms section. All this is summarised in the sandbox's history section. Any disputes on the edits are encouraged (as I mentioned in the sandbox's edit summary).

My part seemed really short though I have searched hard and included many references; hence my adding more information. I said I will be in class; so I will be in class :)

ToYouFromI (talk) 12:03, 27 March 2012 (UTC) ToYouFromI (talk) 12:03, 27 March 2012 (UTC)

Adanna, while I respect the edits you have made in both your part (I appreciate that one) and mine, I have reverted my section because the original precisely states facts. I will not go into details with what I think is wrong with your edited version but to keep it simple I don't think anything needs further clarification. I think you are making it longer by repeating certain things. If you are unsatisfied please contact me (sms) so we can discuss this. But I really think my sections are fine so please if you have time shift focus to the rest of the article. Again, if you strongly oppose anything in my section, contact me in person because this is taking longer than it should. In fact, do you think we can meet tomorrow after class? This way we can get things done faster and write according to standard wikipedia rules. If you want to arrange a meeting sms me today. Cheers, Zeynep.i (talk) 17:58, 27 March 2012 (UTC)

We have had a phonecall regarding this but just to clarify. I edited the article on what I felt needed improvement based on the powerpoints and exercises we have had in class over the course of the semester regarding sentence structure. By all means, if you dispute it, you can go along and revert it--though it would be nice if you provided grammatical reasons why (rather than Wkipedia preciseness). I shall leave it the way you have left it till we discuss this further in Management class (Make that 3:30pm instead of 3:00pm, I don't think the meeting would take a whole hour). In the meantime, I will work on every other section. Till then ToYouFromI (talk) 03:15, 28 March 2012 (UTC)

TYPE OF TUMOR SECTION EDITS. WHAT DO YOU THINK?
1st emboldened = under the adenomas section. The line "poses minimal risk" looks like it should be supported by evidence that states this (i.e. cite a souurce) Indeed the whole section lacks citations. Can something be done to include those?

This might be a silly question but just to clarify Lymphoma- lymphosarcoma is a type of tumor too right? Because that, as well as the on titled "myloperative" are listed under types of tumore even though they are not identified as such.


 *  Melanomas  are not typically common to cats but they do have a category called Bascal cell tumors that are present as a skin condition. They are benign in nature, but are firm and raised from the surface of the skin. They are also more commonly discovered around the neck, head, ears, and shoulder regions. They are commonly treated through chemotherapy or radiation therapy.

'''WORDING NEEDS CLARIFICATION. FOR INSTANCE, WHAT ARE YOU REFERING TO WHEN YOU SAY, "THEY DO HAVE A CATEGORY"? THAT BASAL CELL TUMORS ARE THE SUBTYPE OF MELANOMA THAT AFFECTS CATS MORE?'''

Mast cell tumors: You mentioned treatment options for eveything else. What about this one? — Preceding unsigned comment added by ToYouFromI (talk • contribs) 04:13, 28 March 2012 (UTC)

Osteosarcoma: "aggressive" is an adjective to describe cancer (in everyday terms) I know that. However, you need specific reference backing (variety in referencing) to back up your arguments rather than just one link right at the top of the whole section. ToYouFromI (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 04:39, 28 March 2012 (UTC).

There must be typos in my writings so far, please correct them if you see them :). However, I shall do a one-over spellcheck before submission. A major problem = inadequate referencing and I have pointed that out. One source for five paragraphs of work may hardly be cnsidered adequate. I have been at this for a while and I really am half asleep so will continue tomorrow. I believe I stopped at the Diet section. Really good work whoever worked on the Treatment section.

Also please send me your student #s. So far, I only have Denise's (and mine). Thank you. Also I noticed the article banner is off (?). Was that on purpose? I don't think it was me. If it was I aplogize. However, we need that on there at all times; so even if you undo changes et cetera, make sure it's still on there :) ToYouFromI (talk) 05:36, 28 March 2012 (UTC)

Prevention
Vaccines

Vaccines help the immune system fight off disease-causing organisms, which is another key to prevention. However, vaccines can also cause tumors if administered incorrectly. Vaccines should be given in the right rear leg to ease tumor removal process. Vaccines given in the neck or in between the shoulder blades are most likely to cause tumors and are difficult to remove, which can be fatal to cats.

The emboldened part is ambiguous. What is difficult to remove. The tumor? (I think it's this one) or the vaccine? I adjusted the senetnce to say it referred to the tumors. If this is wrong, please correct it.

Prevention section is definitely well-researched. Good work on using all the links provided you to make that a much stronger argument:D — Preceding unsigned comment added by ToYouFromI (talk • contribs) 13:54, 28 March 2012 (UTC)

Thank you all for putting so much effort into this, I am very impressed by our progress! We have come a long way, considering the original article consisted of 2-3 sentences! Everyone seems to have their own special set of skills and it certainly paid off - the article looks very nice and informative! Great team work y'all! Zeynep.i (talk) 00:37, 29 March 2012 (UTC)

I agree with Zeynep in that we all brought different skills to this article and thats what I think made all the difference throughout its development.But I do have to state at this point Adana I would just make the word document that your going to send out, I mean we can constantly go over this thing and that doesn't mean that all of us are going to be happy (maybe just before sending it look for minor spelling and grammar mistakes but i wouldn't switch alot since we each did our own research and too many adjustments may alter the information all together). I think personally thats why you made us deadlines, and the final part between the second and the due date was to ensure that minor details could be resolved. Kinleyde (talk) 02:12, 29 March 2012 (UTC)

Adanna I have to sleep pretty soon so I would appreciate if you could email what you have so far :) Zeynep.i (talk) 03:19, 29 March 2012 (UTC)

That makes complete sense, Denise.

I emailed it yesterday :) I got a response from Hannah regarding our questions, I have forwarded the response to you and Denise. Please forward it to Samah. I called your two phone numbers: no response.

FOR EVERYONE: Edits/minor issues have been sent out. I may not see you guys ---ever-- after this so I want to say that it was good working with you all--really good. There are very few people I have worked with in the past that turned out to be this efficient!! Thank you. ToYouFromI (talk) 13:05, 29 March 2012 (UTC)