User talk:Tobiascharis/Patricia McKissack

Evaluation of Page
The content is relevant to the topic, and the areas are fairly consistent in terms of development. Personal details could be added under the author's picture. It's also not super clear until the last paragraph that McKissack was a significant voice in African American Children's Literature, specifically. There is little development about McKissack's literary themes, values, or content, which would be relevant for an author. In general, there needs to be a lot more citations. It appears that much of the biographical section might be plagiarized.

Some sources that could be used to develop this page:

Peer Review on Patricia McKissack article
Including more specific headings allowed for information to be moved from the Lead. You did a good job giving focus to the important content for a summary of the subject.

I really like the clarity you brought to this articles structure at large. The headings distribute the information in a more balanced way. Adding a section for KcKissack’s career allowed it to be featured equally with her personal life. The original article had the professional achievements buried a bit by combining those topics.

And editorial observation, the tense seems a bit muddled at the end of the Personal Background. The final paragraph says that Patricia will finish a book on her own after her husband’s death, that she longs to teach through her books, and that she died at the age of 72.

One phrase in the Career section jumped at me too, from the last sentence in the first paragraph. I think changing “their stories” to “the stories” fits better in this context.

The content feels well supported and neutral. It was great to see more citations throughout the article, and the attention that you gave to the references.

I saw a webpage for Patricia McKissack, managed by her representation, and wonder if it could be included in the External Links section.

Great improvements!

Scottdirkb (talk) 19:15, 17 November 2019 (UTC)ScottDirkB