User talk:Tokti/sandbox

Rebekah Boller's Peer Review
After reading your article I think there is room for growth and expanding on what Mrs. Huff is known for. Also, I think it would be important to note that the first line of your article, After the hardship of trying to find out who this mystery woman was is an opinionated sentence that doesn't quite fit with the articles we are supposed to be writing. Reading the beginning of your article did not tell me much about what Mrs. Huff is known for or what she did in technology that is noteworthy. Try to incorporate this layout from Dr. Mannon in order to write your article.


 * Biography (where born, any family, and early experiences that are relevant to her work)
 * Education (where did she go to school, what did she study, did she do anything exceptional there)
 * Career and Work (what businesses did she work in? what field? what positions did she hold?)
 * Major contribution (what is she particularly known for? why is she worth studying?)

I think there is a lot that can be added to your article to make it great!

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You only included one reference, so I think that there is great potential to expand upon what you currently have about Mrs. Sheila Minor Huff! As a guide for research, you can divide it into sections like biography, education, career, and awards/contributions. This will also help you organize the information when writing. You could elaborate on what school she received her degree from, where exactly she worked or who she worked for, when she retired, and even details about her personal life-- like if she had a spouse or children. Lastly, I think the first sentence is mostly opinion rather than fact and could probably be omitted. It would be best to open straight away with “Sheila Minor Huff is a…” and then go on to explain who this “mystery woman” is. Cfirm001 (talk) 21:11, 6 April 2018 (UTC)