User talk:Torioneason

WN Bibliography
On Cleaver: be sure to proofread and use page numbers for easy reference (see my example for Baldwin). It seems, too, that Cleaver is not directly writing about the WN. You should always choose sources that explicitly refer to the primary text, otherwise it could be seen as original research — which is not what Wikipedia is for. —Grlucas (talk) 17:18, 20 September 2018 (UTC)
 * Also, check the accuracy of your actual citation and make sure it includes all the information necessary, like page numbers. Your signature should appear at the end of your entry. Again, see Baldwin for an example. —Grlucas (talk) 17:20, 20 September 2018 (UTC)

WWVN Addition
I see that you added a § on Why Are We in Vietnam? This is a good attempt, but remember that you cannot use any original research on Wikipedia, so your contributions must be sourced. This is why we do the entries to the annotated bibliography first on the talk page. In other words: you must cite all of your additions to any article. Thanks. —Grlucas (talk) 15:38, 28 October 2018 (UTC)

WWVN Bib
Be sure to proofread; there are too many errors here. Also, read carefully and revise; some of your sentences are confused. Use parenthesis at the end of sentences to cite page numbers, and titles of novels should be italicized. Also, your Time review citation is incorrect. Be sure to check these things before you publish. —Grlucas (talk) 22:22, 5 November 2018 (UTC)

WWVN Edit
A very good attempt here. Be sure to proofread to be sure your addition makes sense contextually. Be sure to revise for clarity, like changing this:


 * The main Character DJ was someone who was comprised mentally and emotionally throughout the entirety of the novel.

to


 * D.J. was comprised mentally and emotionally throughout the novel.

Which do you like better? Also, the article uses shortened footnotes; be sure you use those, too. —Grlucas (talk) 00:03, 6 November 2018 (UTC)