User talk:Toxxicpoiison/sandbox

Peer Review-Celina
Hey Jeannie! Your article looks really good so far! I directly edited a few sentences for grammar, but otherwise, I only have a few other suggestions:

In general, I noticed that sometimes sasaeng is in italics and sometimes it's in quotes. I think it would be good if you make the formatting consistent throughout the article!

Where it says "Although the term "sasaeng" was only coined much later" maybe it would be good to be more specific than "much later" if you can? Or qualify it as later than something else if that makes sense!

After the sentence "Industry veterans as well as members of first generation groups such as H.O.T. and g.o.d have given accounts of witnessing or being victims of such fan behavior even prior to the digital era." I noticed there are a lot of citations, which struck me as kind of weird, so I just wanted to point it out and make sure that it's not a mistake or anything.

Also, there doesn't seem to be any citations after the paragraph "Sasaeng fans are understood in the media as beginning as part of the "normal" fandom before abandoning their own personal and social lives in order to stand out or become closer to an idol or celebrity. The media's portrayal of sasaeng behavior is often surrounded by discourses of fear and stigma against selectively represented behaviors, which are viewed as problematic, including skipping school and sleeping in internet cafes to meet with idols." but I feel like there should be? Did you get this information from somewhere?

Maybe think about changing the "Response" subhead to "Legal Response to Sasaeng Fans" or something more specific like that? For some reason, I thought "response" meant the response of sasaeng fans.

In terms of hyperlinks, "Minor Offenses Act" strikes me as something that could be hyperlinked, but then again I'm not sure if there's a wiki article for that. Just a suggestion.

Overall, it's clear you did a lot of research and spent a lot of time on the article! I think it's well-organized and well-written!