User talk:Travon Belton/Percy Two Gun

Travon,

While your wikipedia is short, you do bring in some good information. It's clear that Percy was a self-taught Native American artist who was able to succeed from his work; even more so that he was the only one to do so from the Kainai. From what I was able to see, the only sections you have on Percy Two Gun is his biography and his artworks. The biography is off to a great start; however, you could add some more information to it to give it more depth and meat. As far as your artworks portion, I think you did a great job with the amount. You did exactly the small description of it without analyzing it so that's good but maybe find a sentence or two more to talk about it in a way that would satisfy Shalor's instructions. My final thought is to go through and check your grammar on some things because I noticed in the biography, you put "...reached the age of 50 years of age." It just doesn't sound right and there are a few places where you could add some punctuations to help the sentences flow easier.

Best of luck with the rest of the website, Smalf002 (talk) 03:35, 23 February 2020 (UTC)Sara M

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 6 January 2020 and 13 March 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Travon Belton. Peer reviewers: Smalf002.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 20:38, 19 January 2022 (UTC)