User talk:Trinity2017/sandbox

At first glance, the original Roman finance article (not the edits) does not appear to be well organized, making it hard to read. But, while regarding the potential edits made to the wiki page, it became apparent the Roman finance article will gain several subheadings (Pooling Capital, Private Loans, and Deferred Payment) that will help organize the article. All that has been written thus far seems factual, neutral, and well written. The sources utilized are sufficient as well. I thought it was really helpful that if any Latin was incorporated it was also defined, an example being "publicani (public contractors)." These additions will certainly help any reader who has minimal knowledge about Roman finance.

I liked how the information being added can be related without being repetitive. Adding a subheading about how Roman finance and modern day finance are similar might be considered but is certainly not necessary - it may be difficult to write about that neutrally but since the other edits were done so well, I doubt there will be a problem if you decide to pursue this course of action. Overall, I really enjoyed reading the edits, they were concise, neutral, well-phrased, and interesting.

Sakoundi (talk) 12:47, 21 April 2017 (UTC)

The original article was lacking in citations and subject headings. When you look at the page, it was just a wall of text with little to no organization or distinction as to what the page was about. I think that the edits you made to give the article sub headings will go a long way for the organization. I also note that you added a great many citations to the page, however they are mostly from Temin. I would advise expanding your sources so no one looks at your page and says you drew too many conclusions from a single source.

In terms of expansion, something that might be interesting is adding a section on what happens when a person can't pay back a loan, or goes too deep into debt. I know we talked about that in class and it may be good to mention it in the article.

(talk) 5:19 Sbuch6 (talk) 21:20, 21 April 2017 (UTC)