User talk:Trouter123/Burchell's sandgrouse

Peer Review
Burchell's sandgrouse


 * 1) First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?
 * 2) The article did a very good job presenting the information in a very clear and easily understandable way. I especially liked the part describing how the birds waded in the water and bobbed up and down, I feel that was a very good way of describing the information in a clear way.
 * 3) What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?
 * 4) I don’t know if this is really an issue, but it does sort of run long. I had trouble with this too because I felt there was too much information to put into three or four sentences, but if you could find a way to shorten it and make it more concise I think that would really bring the article together.
 * 5) What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?
 * 6) Besides shortening it, I don’t see anything wrong at all. I think it is very neutral and from the first sentence I know what the rest of the paragraph is about.
 * 7) Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!
 * 8) I liked the way you described the mechanism behind them taking up water into their belly feathers. I think this will help me find a better way to say my information in my article that is easier to understand.

Amatthews31 (talk) 04:46, 16 October 2023 (UTC)