User talk:TruffautStalker/sandbox

Hey! Just some small edit suggestions. I removed to dead links in the article. I'm not entirely sure how quotes work in wiki but Second to None isn't italicized in one of the quotes and there needs to be a space between words, "Weeklyas". If you know the plot of Second to None I would add just a little, just to give context to why they have to bring equipment down a manhole. In the last section following "Angered by the publication..." you say 'Shute' and I wasn't sure if I should change it to Shurey or shown or if it was meant to be Shute. If it is Shute maybe clarify where that name is coming from. Last would be to add to the lead paragraph. You can say that she is well known for her film ____. Try and make it 3-4 sentences. Other than that it looks good! Sunflowerroad (talk) 15:42, 3 November 2019 (UTC) sunflowerroad

Peer Review
Really great article! I really like the use of quotes and the inclusion of the court case really stood out as interesting. I fixed a couple of grammatical and technical errors, and perhaps you could elaborate more on some points, like elaboration on what roles she worked on at the Teddington Film Company. Also, maybe take out the word "comfortable" in the phrase "comfortable middle class family" as it sounds a little subjective. Overall nice work! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Amichevrolet (talk • contribs) 01:02, 5 November 2019 (UTC)