User talk:Try5607/sandbox

Add the film's genre to the first sentence. A lot of pages do this and saying that it's drama or fiction let readers know it's not documentary since the subject matter is real. "It conveys the power to people to look back..." I would change this sentence as it's more sentimental than factual. You could probably keep the second half of that sentence and just shorten the beginning.

The fact about it being filmed in Richmond doesn't seem to fit in the first paragraph. Maybe move it to below the actors.

I think the second paragraph could be moved to it's own section underneath. Reception would fit well as a label.

Plot- [I Can Speak begins with (Get Rid of)] Nah Ok-Bun, an elderly woman [played by Na Moon-hee (Most Wikipedia pages I've looked at don't have the actors names here. You can remove)] who is more famous for her name, “Dokkaebi (Goblin) Granny”, filling out another citizen’s complaint at her district office. People in the district office try to avoid Ok-bun as much as possible because [Ok-bun (she)] always [drives (replace with files)] dozens of complaints at once. [And (remove)] when Ok-bun meets with Kim Min Jae, a young man [played by Lee Je-hoon (delete)] who recently was appointed as the junior civil service officer [and works in a typical inflexible civil servant style,(you can delete this, it is displayed in the next sentence)] she causes [a (delete)] trouble between them. She is dissatisfied with Min Jae’s attitude of not caring about her complaints and [him (delete)] only trying to do the jobs that are assigned to him.

but there is an opportunity..." (Probably can be removed, more descriptive than straightforward.) The silver class run by the local resident center did not fit her level, and the English academy that Ok-bun enrolled with [such determination (delete)] was too hard for Ok-bun to follow the pace of the class and (she) was eventually kicked out of the class. [In the meantime,(delete)] Ok-Bun [saw (verb tense change)] Min Jae speaking English [very(delete)] fluently with a native speaker in the academy. ["Forgetting all of the last bites..." (I'm not sure what this sentence means. It is not a phrase I have heard)] Min Jae [continues to refuse (replace with refuses)] Ok-bun’s request because he [did (does)]not want to take on the troublesome role. [However, Min Jae saw Ok-Bun taking care of his younger brother, Young Jae, by preparing a meal when Min Jae was too busy. Min Jae was moved by her warm caring and decided to become Ok-bun’s English teacher.(These sentences can probably all be combined, such as, "When Min Jae sees Ok-Bun taking care of his younger brother, Young Jae, he is moved by her warmth and agrees to become her English teacher)]

[Being the English teacher of Ok-Bun, Min Jae realizes the genuine reason why Ok-bun learned English. Ok-bun was trying to continue her dear friend Jeong-shim’s dream of testifying in front of comfort women related public hearings (these sentences can also be combined, Min Jae realizes that Ok-Bun wished to learn English to continue her friends dream of testifying in court...)] [Ok-bun and Jeong-shim were both the victims of the comfort woman by Japanese Military (wording implies that they were the victims of comfort women rather than victims of the military by being forced to be comfort women)]

"infinite" is hyperbole, should probably be replaced by "many"

(Sorry if my editing style is confusing. I hope I helped some. If you have any questions maybe you could put them in your talk page?) ===
 * Review_Dambin:
 * From this peer review that this person gave, I have edited some sentences and even created a new section. I've corrected sentences that were unclear and subjective into a more of an objective and informative sentences. I wasn't sure if I had to change the text on the talk page or in the sandbox so I just edited directly on my sandbox. ===