User talk:Tstatkus/sandbox

Hi there! I think this is a good start to your wiki page. Are there any pictures that you could add to your page that would show us what madarosis look like as oppose to someone just losing a few eyelashes? Is this really fragile X syndrome? You have a chart for it on your abstract. It didn’t seem like any of your symptoms match up with that of fragile X syndrome. The mechanism looks like it needs to be explained a little more. If there isn't enough info on it, try to mention that not much is known about its mechanism. It’ll also be good if you can add more info to the demographic, risk factors, and screening section. I don’t think it has to be too long, but we definitely need something there. For the diagnosis, is there anything specific that the doctor should look for to confirm that it is madarosis and not something else? Do we know how the condition is inherited? Is it an autosomal dominant condition or recessive? I think the last two sentences in the diagnosis section should be combined somehow. It is kind of redundant to say it twice. For the research section, can you mention what type of research is being done? Are we going more into molecular research with gene markers or is it more of a clinical trial type of research? Other than that, I think your article is pretty good. It just need a couple more information here and there. -Ngan Do

Sweiner02 (talk) 22:13, 18 November 2015 (UTC)
 * Drop the heading. The full page will add its own, and this just makes your formatting confusing.
 * Don't use subheadings unless they add something. If you do use them, make sure your title make sense. Just because it's a criterion, doesn't mean it should be a subheading.
 * I like your division and description of the causes. It's very clear and well-laid out.
 * Needs some copy editing.
 * Excellent linking in causes and prevention.
 * You have lots of great mechanism detail in causes and prevention. I'd like to hear those connected a little more strongly in mechanism,
 * Cite all your treatments.
 * I'd like to hear more about the first set of research you mention and see some citations.