User talk:Ttbioclass/Ovalipes catharus

Outline Feedback
This is a good start! A more detailed outline would allow me to provide more thorough feedback. For instance, I would list the factors that determine if they cannibalize their mates, and list some of the other mating behaviors you plan to talk about in the article.

The article would be strengthened by having a section that describes general information about their mating systems and how they reproduce. I would organize your addition to the article by having a main section titled "Mating and Reproduction". This main section may have a lead that describes general reproduction information about fertilization mode and egg laying, a subsection describing any mating behaviors that they use to attract and compete for mates, and then a final subsection on cannibalism.

I am happy to give more feedback and adjust the grade if you wish to update the outline! Elioeilish (talk) 20:14, 28 February 2023 (UTC)

Overall very detailed article with a good flow. Global comments: The first paragraph reads well and provides the information on larvae in a chronological order. For the section on mating behaviors, it might be helpful to include information on behaviors that occur before copulation if there is any such as how they attract each other or how the male chooses which female to carry. Some of the information in the first paragraph could get its own subheading, such as "Larval Development" and then the last few sentences about breeding seasons could be added to the mating behaviors section. I would also be interested to know how males can tell if females have mated with other males in the sexual cannibalism section if it's known. Local comments: Citations were used properly throughout with good spacing. Also as mentioned, the readability is great and is easy to understand. I would move this sentence, "After mating the females move onto unknown spawning grounds deeper in the water and the males move to foraging grounds", to the end of the paragraph as it's about post–mating. I might change the wording of this sentence, "Some females attempt to resist but when picked up remained passive", as it's a little blunt and could maybe change it to "Some females attempt to resist but when they are picked up by males, they remain passive". Otherwise seems like a really good contribution to the Wiki. Layana234 (talk) 00:46, 21 March 2023 (UTC)

Peer Review 1
Great work on this! I really like the organization of topics, and I think you did a good job of separating the different topics you discussed in this draft. I also like how one section isn't much bigger than the others, each subtopic seems to have sufficient information to provide a basic understanding. Something I think you could add to make this better is expanding on the idea of sexual cannibalism being opportunistic a bit. Maybe you could add why it's specifically beneficial, such as sexual cannibalism allows the male to have more energy to seek out further mating opportunities, or males eating other males might reduce the number of competitors, etc. One other aspect I think you could add is discussing some general estimates for the proportion of larvae lost to disease or predation during early development; since the range of larvae that female can produce is so large I think a specific estimate might be helpful here.

I think you did a great job with the flow and wording of this draft as well! Within paragraphs, I think you organized your sentence structure really well and explained the phenomena in a way that's easy to understand. I liked how you provided plenty of citations that will allow readers to further look into the topics you discussed. There were a couple short segments where I think the wording could be made a bit clearer - in the first section, the fragment "and cause sexual maturity to be obtained sooner." came off a little awkward. I think if you change it to something like "and cause individuals to reach sexual maturity more quickly" it might sound a bit better. Also, in the Mating Behaviors section, the fragment "females move onto unknown spawning grounds" was a bit ambiguous; I think it might benefit if you explained what unknown spawning grounds are or just reworded it a bit.

Overall this is in great shape, good work so far! Humblebear1 (talk) 01:48, 21 March 2023 (UTC)


 * I expanded on why it could be opportunistic and included an example of hunger being an influence on the cannibalism. For the amount of larvae lost I could not find a specific amount, but crabs in general usually lose a lot of larvae so I changed it to say that a large amount of eggs would be lost. I also changed the fragment you mentioned that talked about sexual maturity to sound better and cleared up the second fragment to be less ambiguous. Ttbioclass (talk) 15:57, 4 April 2023 (UTC)

Peer Review
Global comment: Overall, I thought your first draft was great. Firstly, I think your draft looks well-organized and lets your ideas flow nicely. I also like how both the subsections in the lead section of your draft are relatively even in terms of content. For improvements, if possible, I think it would be helpful to specify the proportions of larvae lost due to disease and predation. Also, in the mating behavior section, I think it would be interesting to read if you can expand a little more on how males assist females in the molting process. Local comment: Your first draft seems well-written and the sentence structure is good in the lead section and the sexual cannibalism section. The readability in these sections is great as the sentences have a nice flow to them and it is very easy to understand. I also liked how you used multiple citations in each section from all the sources you listed. I found that the mating behavior section is relatively harder to read than other sections. Some sentences were a little awkward to read but rephrasing and reorganizing some of the sentences in that section might help in making the article easily readable. For instance, I would rephrase the sentence “Some females attempt to resist but when picked up remained passive” as “Some females attempt to resist being picked up but when they are picked up, they tend to remain passive”. Also, since the sentence "After mating the females move onto unknown spawning grounds deeper in the water and the males move to foraging grounds" talks about the situation after mating, it would sound better if you move it to the end of the paragraph. Maybe you can join two post-mating sentences and change it to “After mating, the females are released who then move onto unknown spawning grounds deeper in the water, and the males move to foraging grounds”. Again, I think your first draft is great and I enjoyed reading it! Jmt39 (talk) 07:38, 23 March 2023 (UTC)


 * I couldn't find exact numbers on the amount of larvae lost, but crabs in general usually lose a large amount of larvae so I changed that part to be less ambiguous. I expanded on how males assist in the molting process. I rephased the sentence involving the females being picked up and remaining passive that you suggested to sound better. I moved the sentence involving where they go after mating to the end and combined it with the other sentence like you suggested. Ttbioclass (talk) 16:14, 4 April 2023 (UTC)

Peer Review
Your wikipedia page is very well organized, well written, and informative. I really enjoyed reading it and the subjects you covered were very engaging. Also, I think your explanations are comprehensible for the average reader and that is a major positive since I feel many wikipedia pages are just drowned out by jargon and subsequently difficult to navigate and utilize. Overall, very good job!

Global Comments:

Each section was very thorough and well ordered.

I would suggest putting your mating sections before your reproduction section because it might be helpful to read about the subjects in the order in which they happen chronologically. However, the present order would suffice as well.

I would suggest hyperlinking words that the reader may be unfamiliar with. Personally, i dont know much about the parts of a crab so you could possibly hyperlink terms like dactyli and carapace.

Local Comments:

Very good grammar and paragraph structure. I don't have much to add grammar wise or in general for local!

Could you possibly elaborate a little on the "vigorous waving" of the female that causes the larvae to break out of their eggs. does she wave the eggs around?

Have researchers observed a reason or proposed a reason why the female moves to spawning grounds after mating while the male moves to foraging grounds? it might be worthwhile to add some information to this process if available.

In this sentence : “Unlike in other examples of sexual cannibalism size was not shown to have an effect on whether cannibalism occurred” i would add a comma after cannibalism. Scoobydoo567 (talk) 00:03, 13 April 2023 (UTC)


 * I hyperlinked some terms that readers might not have been familiar with. I clarified about the vigorous waving. They do not know the reason why the females move there nor where they actually go. I added the comma. Ttbioclass (talk) 00:51, 3 May 2023 (UTC)

Peer Review 4
Global Comments: Fantastic job! The article is set up perfectly, and you explained the mating behaviors of Ovalipes catharus extremely well. As for improvements, maybe add something about the months when they mate since they are native to New Zealand and Australia and their winter months are different than ours. Also, you might want to add some information about the male-male competition in this species (If it’s actually occurring. I might have misunderstood the last sentence in the sexual cannibalism section, but it sounded like the males were competing during the breeding season).

Local Comments: Everything looks great! This article is clear and readable. For improvements, you might want to add hyperlinks for some of the words such as “benthic.” In the fourth sentence of the mating behavior paragraph, add an apostrophe to females in “remove parts of the females old carapace.” --GreenTea283 (talk) 02:08, 13 April 2023 (UTC)


 * I added which months they mate. I added information about the male-male competition. I added hyperlinks and added the apostrophe. Ttbioclass (talk) 00:52, 3 May 2023 (UTC)