User talk:Tuj14627/sandbox

1. First, what does the article-draft do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? The article draft has good quote integration. They use interesting quotes that appeal to the topic. I knew sugar was bad for you and it was hard to stop eating it, yet the word 'addictive' is quoted, giving insight as to why it is hard to stop eating it.

2. Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic? Everything seems necessary to the success of the article. It is on focus and relevant.

3. Does the article focus too much on negative or positive information? Explain. The article contains no bias. The article presents factual and truthful information that reflects the true affects of ingredients like high fructose corn syrup.

Remember, neutral doesn't mean "the best positive light" or "the worst, most critical light." It means a clear reflection of various aspects of a topic.

4. Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view?Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors? The article remains neutral and unbiased. It relies on well picked quotes from online sources to drive the point home.

5. Are there any changes you would suggest the author apply to the article? Why? I would suggest maybe integrated the quotes at the beginning into a sentence format rather than just starting out with them. Besides that, the article is great!

6. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! I do not believe our articles have a connection.

7. JordanmManson (talk) 03:48, 29 October 2019 (UTC)Jordan Manson 15:41, 28 October 2019 (UTC)"