User talk:Tuj54739/sandbox

1. First, what does the article-draft do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? - The article-draft is concise and adds the necessary information that the chosen article requires. There is a lot of information from each of the sources used for the article-draft. The article-draft provides statistics that prove to be neutral and clearly covers the topic from a neutral standpoint.

2. Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic? -No, the article-draft does not contain any unnecessary information or anything that may be off-topic. Everything within the draft comes straight from the source information and contributes to the chosen article. The only suggestion I have is to review the grammar and structure of the sentences in order to compose a more effective draft.

3. Does the article focus too much on negative or positive information? Explain. Remember, neutral doesn't mean "the best positive light" or "the worst, most critical light." It means a clear reflection of various aspects of a topic. -No, the article focuses on factual information regarding food-chain efficiency. The article stands on even ground rather than being biased.

4. Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view? Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors? - The article clearly states its facts in an effective manner. The statements come directly from reliable sources such as an encyclopedia and an entry from the library database.

5. Are there any changes you would suggest the author apply to the article? Why? - The article draft provides the necessary information. The only advice I have for now is to change the wording or sentence structure of the second and fourth sentences. With proper wording, they can be more effective than they already are. Rearranging the structure of these sentences can greatly increase the effectiveness.

6. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!

-Unfortunately, both of our articles differ greatly in subject manner. Therefore, I am unable to use any information from it.

7. Sean DempseySeandemps (talk) 15:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)

Thank you Sean, I will work on those things in my draft. Tuj54739 (talk) 02:10, 4 November 2019 (UTC)