User talk:TwilligToves/Archives/2008/April

Thriller
Ok, i have removed the nomination, thanx for your input. Realist2 (talk) 21:01, 9 April 2008 (UTC)

Janet Jackson FAC
Aside from the one typo, would you be willing to support the nomination or give constructive criticism on the nomination page? Thankyou. Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 21:25, 9 April 2008 (UTC)

Withdrawing FACs
BuddingJournalist, where's the withdraw? Also, when there are no opposes, I handle them differently, so I removed it from the archive file. Let me know where the request to withdraw is, and then you can watch my contribs for how to handle. Sandy Georgia (Talk) 22:28, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * OK, I won't do anything yet ... and then I'll show you how it's done :-) Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 22:30, 9 April 2008 (UTC)

Sheesh, I went for a nice herbal bath after a stressful day, and you jumped into action in my brief absence :-)) OK, I'll fix it. Thriller had opposes, so it gets archived and botified. Janet Jackson had no oppposes, so it would have been handled differently. I'll teach you, but no, I don't want to put instructions out to let just anyone be doing the archiving, because undoing and redoing is more work for me. Give me a minute to catch up. Sandy Georgia (Talk) 22:34, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Ack, sorry, my gardners showed up; I'll catch up with you in a bit. Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 22:45, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * OK, I left a response at WT:FAC; if you want to learn all the steps, let me know. Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 23:17, 9 April 2008 (UTC)

I'm back. Two different cases:
 * FAC withdrawn with Opposes, to be recorded in articlehistory
 * 1)  Remove transcluded fac page from WP:FAC
 * 2)  Move the transcluded fac page to the top of the correct monthly archive file, with an edit summary saying withdrawn (for my future stats, distinguish from a fail).  Moving it to the monthly archive file will trigger GimmeBot to do the rest.
 * 3)  Make sure the  template is still on the article talk page, so the bot won't stall.
 * 4)  Remind the nominator not to remove the fac template, with a link to WP:FAC/ar.


 * Premature FAC withdrawn with no opposes, or no opposes of substance (this is why judgment of fac regulars is required. It's a judgment call as to whether the FAC should be recorded into articlehistory.)
 * 1)  Remove transcluded fac page from WP:FAC   Do NOT move to archive file, as it doesn't need to be botified.
 * 2)  Move the FAC page to the next open /archiveN, lowercase a.
 * 3)  Clear the redirect on the original FAC file, leaving it ready for next submission, linking to previous FAC withdrawn (no uppercase p all uppercase FAC, this is for some other scripts)
 * 4)  Remove the  template from the article talk page, and leave a note on the talk page that the fac was withdrawn, with a link to the archive file.

Sandy Georgia (Talk) 23:44, 9 April 2008 (UTC)

Peer review for Ninja Gaiden (2004 video game)
Hi BuddingJournalist. I would like to invite you to join in the peer review of the console action-adventure game Ninja Gaiden. Please take a look and suggest ways to improve the article and what should be avoided. Thank you. Jappalang (talk) 10:27, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Hi again! I have rewritten the entire article using tools to help and according to grade level and Flesh-Kincaid metrics, it has become significantly readable to 9th grade or higher. However, tools are simply mechanical devices that tend to give weird advice. As such, I again request for your aid to look for any problematic grammar or prose in the article. I really appreciated your past feedback. It was detailed and launched me to improve myself with the tools. Thank you again. Jappalang (talk) 06:51, 26 April 2008 (UTC)

How about this?
How about this based on the advice of Joseph Williams on writing a concise sentence? Ottava Rima (talk) 05:46, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Note - I changed some of the words after that edit to "tighten" the sentence. Ottava Rima (talk) 06:03, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Request - If you have a chance, could you skim through the Drapier's Letters for other potentially problematic wording and we can work it out together? Thanks. Ottava Rima (talk) 20:37, 16 April 2008 (UTC)

Thanks for the Emery
Thank you for taking the trouble to review Emery Molyneux. It is now a FA, and I am sure the recent flurry of activity made the difference. The main editor User:Jacklee seems to be on a wikibreak; but I'll nudge him to attend to the rest of your comments, which I'm sure he will. qp10qp (talk) 15:52, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Welcome to the FA-Team
Thanks for signing up to the FA-Team. Our spirit is that we want many more excellent articles to be featured, and will help editors improve them so that they meet the grade: we also want editors to learn how to write great articles. Your access to sources is an amazing resource which I'm sure will help to improve articles. It is fantastic that you have joined the team. Thanks again, Geometry guy 20:22, 20 April 2008 (UTC)

Mario Vargas Llosa
Hi there! Thank you kindly for your thorough review of Mario Vargas Llosa. I've addressed the majority of the comments that you've posted, to the best of my ability. Please have a look to see if I have adequately assessed your concerns. Thanks again. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:18, 22 April 2008 (UTC)

Nice catch!
See my reply here :): http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Talk:Peter_Jennings&diff=207895739&oldid=207786596 .¤~Persian Poet Gal (talk) 16:47, 24 April 2008 (UTC)

Featured article candidates/Age of Empires
As well as copyediting myself, I've had two others do so...I hope this helps ease your concerns. Cheers, dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 08:36, 29 April 2008 (UTC)

Requesting peer review of Facebook
Hi, if you have time, could you please take a look at Facebook and point out any major copyediting issues (or anything else in general), and post them at Peer review/Facebook/archive3? I've been going through the article and am currently copyediting it, but if you can spot any major issues in the article by just glancing at it, then I know I have my work cut out for me. I plan on bringing the article to FAC soon. Thanks! Gary King ( talk ) 23:52, 30 April 2008 (UTC)