User talk:Twofingered Typist/Archives/2018/January

Volvo V70 CE
Hello,

thank you for doing the copy edit I requested for the V70 article. It's a lot better now. (preemptively asking for forgiveness for any grammatical errors)

For the moment I do not see the need to make an account, maybe later. So unless you mind your talk page is where I will respond for this exchange of words.

There are a few concerns. I will address the things you mentioned first.

Wheel sizes for cars, at least to my knowledge, are always given in inches. Both diameter and width. So it's a 16 inch wheel anywhere in the world. For context: 17 inch wheels were standard for every market except the US. Most likely because of customer complains about the harsh ride on the previous 850 R model. No lowered sports suspension for the same reason.

The size and storage increase numbers will be moved and conversion(s) will be added. For example the numbers for the second generation probably shouldn't appear in the lead section.

Finding reliable information about the V70 Hybrid trials is difficult. Should I come across something I will add it.

The past and present tense is the result of different writers adding information at various points in time. So far I have redone the first generation entirely and a few things on the second generation section but very little for the third generation. If you say that it's not unusual it will remain as is.

My concerns.

Volvo uses lots and lots of acronyms. This gets confusing fast. What is the correct way to deal with acronyms that are needed for context but if spelled out make everything more complicated that it needs to be? And how to deal with badging for models?

For example the RTI navigation system -> Road and Traffic Information System but it exists also as RTTI +RTI -> Real Time Traffic Information for RTI. Several versions exist of the RTI as a CD based Gen 1 and Gen 2, a DVD based Gen 1 and Gen 2, a HDD based Gen 1, Sensus RTI Gen 1... you get the idea. Can I use the abbr template for such occasions? Similar things with TRACS that became STC which was incorporated into DSTC which evolved into a few generations of DSTC. Same with SIPS which is found on every model yet the airbag design has gone through changes so for context it's needed to avoid confusion.

With the badging I mean things like the V70 TDI. Linking to the article is fine I guess but Volvo just called it TDI without a care in the world. Technically speaking the R is also something that would need more explanation but I feel this would open a can of worms. Suddenly everything would need an explanation. Like the FT or DRIV-e models which are different from models with actual Driv-e engines. Not to mention that Volvo makes plenty of errors in their brochures, online stuff and even workshop guides.

Some of your new wording allows for interpretation(s) that I had wanted to avoid. For example the first gen V70 is based on the 850 yet is complete different. Kind of like renovating a house and just leaving the position of the roof as it was. Will try and come up with something new and than ask for your opinion, if that's okay.

Regards,

2A04:4540:1714:B501:9174:A7A4:916:3A17 (talk) 21:01, 10 January 2018 (UTC)

A barnstar for you!

 * You're most welcome. Thank you. Twofingered Typist (talk) 12:56, 14 January 2018 (UTC)

Thanks for removing the COI tag on Andrew Batavia!
I put it on there last year in the first place, and added the article to my "to do someday when I have a few free hours" list. Monday ended up being that "someday"; I was fairly sure I excised all the sentimental family-written material from the article before my eyes started to bleed, but I don't like to be the arbiter of whether removing my own tag is appropriate. I very much appreciate your objective assessment, even if it means that, Wikipedia having received its fair share of my housekeeping time this week, I have no excuse but to turn to my refrigerator. Thanks again! - Julietdeltalima (talk) 18:31, 17 January 2018 (UTC)

Proofreading of the Battle of Vranje
Hello, I saw in the history of the article that you proofread it in the past. I finished translating the article from the Serbian Wikipedia. Can I ask you once again to do it again? It would mean so much for me. I am available for any further question. Thank you!-- VuXman talk 13:54, 27 January 2018 (UTC)
 * I've gone through the article, as requested, and made a few changes I felt were necessary. Regards. Twofingered Typist (talk) 15:17, 27 January 2018 (UTC)

Grammer
Hi TT, you made a change to a BLP on a Pakistani MP. You changed it from "as a candidate of Pakistan Muslim League (N) from Constituency" to "as a candidate for the Pakistan Muslim League (N) for Constituency". I'm just curious if the former was grammatically wrong? I've used the same in thousands of BLP's on Pakistani MPs. Please advice and ping when reply. --Saqib (talk) 17:41, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
 * Perhaps my version is a more common way of describing a candidate in the Western world. Your usage if you replace mine, however, should read: "as a candidate of the Pakistan Muslim League from the Constituency". The article "the" required before both terms. Twofingered Typist (talk) 18:14, 2 February 2018 (UTC)

Interstellar (film)
I've requested a copy edit for Interstellar (film) at the Guild, and was wondering if you'd consider it as your next choice. More than just being really impatient, I've been impressed with your past work and would be honoured to nominate it for GA with your prose. Cognissonance (talk) 00:37, 4 February 2018 (UTC)
 * I'd be happy to have a look at it for you.Twofingered Typist (talk) 19:23, 4 February 2018 (UTC)