User talk:TylerManko/sandbox

Jessica's Feedback

I would work on how you explain things to your readers. If you have never seen the movie, it is very confusing.The content is all there and good but it does need reorganized. Some of the sentences are too long and need broken up. It would also help to go into more detail explaining things such as why Sid is two characters. The text is relevant to the Wikipedia article. While they do not duplicate the Wikipedia, more information has to be added in order to complete the section. The addition is in chronological order from what I can tell but can be organized differently so that it flows better. The tone is neutral but I am unable to access your source (it will not allow me to click on it or copy it into the search bar).

Logans Feedback
The information used is good. Small grammar errors. Sentence structure is good. Overall, it is pretty good. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Logan-James2835 (talk • contribs) 16:30, 22 February 2019 (UTC) Try to make the information come out clearer for people who do not know much about this topic. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Logan-James2835 (talk • contribs) 16:35, 22 February 2019 (UTC)