User talk:Tylergerlach/sandbox

Hey Tylergerlach! So in order to improve your article contribution further, I recommend that you add in-text citations. This way you will avoid possible plagiarism flags and it will also legitimize your content. In addition, I think in order to help the flow of you content, you should put a period after "...saw around them." Then from there have the sentence follow read "This was done by adapting nonviolence activism similar to that of Mahatma Gandhi...". My finally suggestion, is to rewrite from the beginning of "They saw" all the way to Philosophy, mainly because when I read it, it seemed rather confusing. I hope these suggestions help! Kkait9 (talk) 17:45, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Engaged Buddhism peer review Crumbsnstuff (talk) 11:39, 22 October 2018 (UTC)
Hi Tyler, I was looking through the article and noticed that it's a "start" class article which just means it has room for improvement although I think the information that is there seems to be a good compilation. Your editing ideas I think wold definitely add information to develop the article although things like the seemingly casual mention of the Fourteen Precepts for example, already have an article of their own or a citation for the information. I think where the article may be developed for more complete information might be by including where the current movement stands, where it may be more active in terms of membership (Rather than just "The West"), perhaps major movements or causes that they may have supported or started after the Vietnam War. Also, I see that you found an an article as reference where Engaged Buddhism takes from Christianity and Ghandian practices, and since in translations it's mentioned as Worldly and Leftist Buddhism, perhaps a section for expansion would be on further inter-religious interaction and influence if there is enough information on that subject to be found. Your edits seem to be on point to guidelines on the information that may be relevant to the article. Good work. Alejandro Gonzalez. Crumbsnstuff (talk) 11:39, 22 October 2018 (UTC)