User talk:TyrioneBanks/sandbox

Russiacarter (talk) 14:57, 27 April 2020 (UTC)RussiaCarter

Very good information, I haven’t even heard of the Ida B. Wells club and I think it is important tot include. I’m not sure if the pre-exiting page explained what the Ida B. Wells club mission. I also think you should consider making this sentence more clear, "The club advocated to have a housing project in Chicago named after the founder, Ida B. Wells, and succeeded, making history in 1939 as the first housing project named after a colored woman." Goodluck!

I love the essential information you will be adding to page and highlighting the work done by Ms. Wells. I agree with Russia, while the last sentence is grammatically correct it is hard to read and it is unclear what section of the page you will be adding to. A simple way to provide clarity would be to break the sentence into two sentences after Wells or by removing the comma after succeeded and adding the word in. Besides that edit, I really enjoy your contribution. MJCalhoun (talk) 05:37, 29 April 2020 (UTC)