User talk:U1089327/sandbox

Feedback on possible topics
These all look like great options. "Edo period in popular culture" especially looks like it could be reorganized and enriched beyond a glorified list, but the other options could all use improvement as well. See what kind of quality sources you can find for each one over the next few weeks and let that drive your decision. Ctextor at uofu (talk) 11:54, 25 September 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
When I read over the wikipedia page for your topic, it seemed like some of it could be reworded so that it sounds less stiff? Just because there's redundancy and if you would like to fix that, I think that would improve the article. Other suggestions I have about the writing would be to change the sentences surrounding the additional sentences you've added so that the article doesn't sound weird. (The second point I've made here is probably more important than the first.) I'm not quite sure which sources are ones you've added and which are not in the references section of your sandbox, but from the looks of the sentences you added, it seems like there's a lot to add about KWAU. I think I had a hard time understanding your references in your sandbox because the numbering of it compared to the one on the original article are slightly different and off. I decided to check sources 11 and 14 in your sandbox. I picked these two because they're used in the newer sections you've added, and it looks like you've included this information into your article. As far as I can tell, your sources are good sources.

Hope this is helpful!

Jyanken (talk) 07:09, 9 November 2019 (UTC)