User talk:Ufbookworm/sandbox

Peer Review by Ruvi
Some proofreading and suggestions on sentence structure. The changes are followed by (*):

"Since her graphic novels, Bechdel(*) has continued to post comic strips for Dykes to Watch Out For(*) through Seven Days, an independent newsweekly source(*). In 2014, she created a comic strip called Fun Home! The Musical [1] (will add what it is about later on) In 2016, she created a comic strip titled Pièce de Résistance[2](*), working alongside Pamela Polston, the cofounder, coeditor, and associate publisher of Seven Days(*).

(*start new paragraph if you're going to discuss a certain topic in depth*) In 2017, she created two comic strips in regards to the presidential elections. One of the comic strips is titled Tackles the Ides of Trump[3], (March 14, 2017) (*include dates in parenthesis so they don't clutter up the sentences*) and the second one is titled Ponders How to Unify a Divided Country[4] (July 05, 2017)."

"Vermont, where she has been residing for the past couple of years."
 * if you're going to talk about where she lives, add it to the "personal life" section. it's a little out of place in the above section.

I think you have a pretty good foundation for your edits so far. Just make sure that you do follow through with discussing the individual comic strips, mostly in relation to how they add to Bechdel's body of work. Ufrsgonz (talk) 16:06, 19 November 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for your suggestions Ruvi, I have made the corrections to the page and will continue to add onto the page this week Ufbookworm (talk) 19:29, 21 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review by Alyssa
I think Ruvi did a great job discussing the technical components of your edits so far. I noticed that you want to discuss the ''Fun Home! The Musical'' comic in your edits. Is this different from the Fun Home comic that is mentioned under the "Graphic Novels" section of Bechdel's current page? I think it will be interesting for you to go into the other comics that Bechdel has created that are only mentioned or even flat out bypassed in the case of Pièce de Résistance and Tackles the Ides of Trump. Be careful when discussing the politically charged comics to avoid bias or original research. Aprad17 (talk) 16:26, 19 November 2018 (UTC)

Thank you Alyssa for your suggestions, I will take them into considerations as I continue to add more information about her this week Ufbookworm (talk) 19:29, 21 November 2018 (UTC)