User talk:Unclebarry79/sandbox

General
It's good to see that you've started some linking, but you'll want to be a lot more thorough in linking the final version. Same with citations. Sweiner02 (talk) 20:34, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Obviously you're more at the outline stage at this point, which is fine. The overall structure and content look good, although you've got a lot of organizing, cleaning and ease of reading work ahead of you. Sweiner02 (talk) 20:34, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Mechanism
Aneurysm is so important here that you probably want to define it, not just link it. Sweiner02 (talk) 20:34, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Make sure the page is accessible to an 8th grade reading level. I'm having some difficulty parsing your mechanism. Pull it apart, explain things, link things.Sweiner02 (talk) 20:34, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Diagnosis
You haven't explained what tools they do use to diagnose this. Sweiner02 (talk) 20:34, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Treatments
What about surgical treatment for the aneurism?Sweiner02 (talk) 20:34, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

What's the prognosis? Sweiner02 (talk) 20:34, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Recent Research
On a quick google scholar search I found at least 3 articles on it in the past 10 years. Sweiner02 (talk) 20:34, 24 July 2015 (UTC)