User talk:Valerie.ov

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Hello, Valerie.ov, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Brianda and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Smoking ban additions
Hi @Valerie.ov, When you moved your changes to the main article, there were a few problems. I've undone your changes for the time being. There were some formatting issues with the references that made it hard to read and understand the text. Also the text was mainly about a CA law. When you write about it, you have to provide details that makes it clear where the law is from, since it doesn't apply to all of the US or the world, and think about how it fits in the section you added it to.

You can go ahead and add things back in once you address the concerns above, but check carefully against what's already in the article. When you add content to an article, think about how they work with the rest of the text. When you add information, make sure that information isn't already presented somewhere else in the article. Feel free to reach out if you have any questions. Looping in Brianda (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:24, 29 August 2023 (UTC)


 * @Valerie.ov Some of the comments made here by @Brianda (Wiki Ed) are quite similar to the ones I made on the grading rubric. When you have made the suggested changes, I'd be happy to update your grade on this assignment. Just send me a message when you have completed this or if you wanted further explanation on what is being discussed here. Bergmanucsd (talk) 19:46, 29 August 2023 (UTC)