User talk:Van2169847/sandbox

This edit uses a reliable source and relates to the topic chosen. The language in this edit was clear but partially confusing at some points because it described what parental controls were but in a somewhat confusing way in my opinion. This edit had all the important points for parental controls and it seemed reliable. The edit did use neutral sources and language. Miahardesty (talk) 04:02, 31 October 2018 (UTC)

This edit needs more clarification. Mentions multidimensional, but only states two dimensions. It's great that the sentence after the introductory sentence starts with "One...." but the next point should begin with "Second...." vs. using the word "Then".--Ksbochenski (talk) 02:05, 1 November 2018 (UTC)