User talk:Vdpa222/sandbox

Overall very good as far as the amount of information you are adding. However, (I know this is just a sandbox)but be cautious on your wording choice, it gets a little confusing when you are talking about the characteristics. I would list a few instead of just directly referencing a link so people can see some of them. Also I noticed that in the last sentence of the first paragraph talking about HPD you say "According to HPD is classified in the dramatic cluster" I'm not sure if you meant to say the DSM says this or not. On that note, you might want to say which of the clusters it's in (A,B,C) you could even link it to the page talking about them. Use some references(whether it's text books or journals) when talking about the "many" people who believe where HPD evolves from. I like the idea of listing movies and characters that have been portrayed as having this disorder, but use caution, everyone knows Hollywood blows everything out of proportion, so before you list something do your research on the character and make sure it's believable that they would be diagnosed with Histrionic Personality Disorder.--LEHussain (talk) 18:39, 18 April 2012 (UTC)

This is a really good start to your article. You have a lot of good information. There are a few things that I would fix though. I know that you were having trouble with your links, but make sure you fix them before you post the article. It makes the article very hard to read when you are trying to read around them. I would also explain what the HPD is, it is an organization that I have never heard of so probably no one else would have heard of it either. How do we know that it is a reliable resource? I also think that you should list the characteristics of this disorder instead of linking it to the website. The only thing that I have left to suggest is that you don't refer to yourself in the article. It seems a little unprofessional. I really enjoyed your article and I can't wait to see it finished! Agpa222 (talk) 05:10, 19 April 2012 (UTC)Agpa222Agpa222 (talk) 05:10, 19 April 2012 (UTC)