User talk:VegettaDaGoat/Stefano Langone

Update on progress
Hi

I see quite a few new facts here, which looks like good progress. But a lot of the material from the current page is missing, which is a problem. You will want to have a version of the whole article, looking the way you want it to look on the live version of Wikipedia. See if you can fix the copy-paste problem (make sure you are in source editing mode when you copy things, or the table and infoboxes will break). Then organize all the pieces you are adding until it looks the way you want it to. Let me know when I should take another look.

Kaylea Champion (talk) 00:47, 11 February 2022 (UTC)

feedback on progress
Hi

You are making progress in the right direction. Your next areas to work on are...


 * Citations. Some of the new details are lacking references, and folks will want to know where you got the information. I know you've been digging into the details, so show off your work here.
 * Structure. The 2011-present section feels a little more like a list of facts but it needs to read like a paragraph, giving a biography in a way that tells a story. You've added a lot of new details, so it seems like you could break this section into two pieces. Maybe there is a natural point in the timeline where his career took a different direction? The information about his wife and recovery from the polyp could both be put into the Early Life section -- but maybe that should be split into Childhood and Personal Life, with Personal Life starting with the 2009 accident?

Keep pushing!

Kaylea Champion (talk) 02:35, 12 February 2022 (UTC)

feedback on progress
Hi

I made a few more tweaks to the text, see what you think. I see some new sources popping up -- unfortunately there is a little bit of a reliability issue with them. What folks really want in a Wikipedia article are sources independent of the individual; you can rely some on their website and verified social media but the preference is for third party sources. Are the Instagram posts available without a login? When I click them, it just asks me to log in. There's a policy on how to use Instagram: "The official page of a subject may be used as a self-published, primary source, but only if it can be authenticated as belonging to the subject. (See Wikipedia:Verifiability#Self-published sources.)" -- taken from https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:External_links/Perennial_websites#Facebook,_MySpace,_Instagram

In those cases, you will want to frame it as self-published, i.e. "On X day, Langone announced he would be touring with..." -- because what you are citing is him saying that's what he's doing.

I hope that helps? Keep going, this is getting better every time you work on it :)

Kaylea Champion (talk) 21:22, 12 February 2022 (UTC)

Go Live Approval
Hi

You did it!

As a reminder, here are our go-live steps:


 * 1) Final read-through draft.
 * 2) Check live article for changes. [History Tab]
 * 3) Two browsers side by side, if you can. Source editing mode ("Code mode"), not visual editor.
 * 4) Paragraph by paragraph copy, leaving behind an explanatory edit summary after each chunk of changes.
 * 5) Note on article talk page.
 * 6) Note at the top of your sandbox version.
 * 7) Submit a link to your article on Canvas.
 * 8) Celebrate!

Kaylea Champion (talk) 05:45, 13 February 2022 (UTC)