User talk:Vgnegrete/sandbox

Peer Review
Overall, you have a great start to your Wikipedia page. You were able to complete the most important part for this stage of this assignment, which was to answer what this artist is most well known, the "Mexican Passion" in this case. You definitely want to add more information about what the artist has done lately as well as any life experiences that may have impacted her career as an artist.

I noted a few grammar errors: "In 1968 her and her family"-Try rephrasing this to 'In 1968, Yolanda and her family' "All of this capturing (is) what is considered"- Are you missing an 'is'? Try to reword this sentence "Then later worked solo as an independent photographer" -solo is repetitive of independent. Try rephrasing it, 'Later on, she worked as an independent photographer" "Along with other grants that she earned it helped" -add a comma

A few questions you might want to consider answering:

-What type of magazines did she work for? -Was her work focused on the same objective(the relationship between people and the city) for each of the countries she visited? Was there anything unique about her work in other countries? *If you have enough information about each country you could try giving each country its own sub headline -Is there a specific reason for why she wanted to capture this relationship in photography? -What are the visual books that she creates about? Are they created as different themes? -Was there a particular experience in her life that inspired her to become a photographer? -Was does her later career comprise, does she still have the same objectives? *Consider creating its own headline for this