User talk:Vgs0208/Body dysmorphic disorder

Hi Vgso2o8 ! I peer reviewed your bibliography so far. I think the outline you included at the end of your bibliography is incredibly helpful for when you get started on drafting. All of the sources you included seem true and reliable. I believe it's good how many references you included as well.

The different central topics you included in your outline like Billie Eilish and Lili Reinhart could be such a great inclusion for the body of your article. Just make sure to include an explanation of what the Body dysmorphic disorder is so your audience isn't confused before reading about your main topic about sharing others stories.

Draft
This draft is really shaping up - - thorough and well-cited. Two things: first, I would reduce the paragraph lengths - - so that they focus on communicating the necessary information as efficiently as possible; second, edit your sentences to eliminate grammatical/usage glitches and smooth out your prose. ProfHanley (talk) 17:40, 6 November 2023 (UTC)

Draft II
Looks very good. How about some more internal links - - to TV shows/movies/etc. I think after a little more linking, you're ready to go live! ProfHanley (talk) 17:26, 14 November 2023 (UTC)


 * I linked both the tv show and movie that are brought up. Is there anything else I can link? I cant think of anything else. Vgs0208 (talk) 04:33, 15 November 2023 (UTC)