User talk:VicLis18/sandbox

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https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Marie_Maynard_Daly (Marie Maynard Daly, the first African American woman to receive a PhD in chemistry within the USA). Sterilization of Native American women in the USA African Americans and birth control in the USA Virginia Sterilization Act of 1924

Topic (WGS 350)
Sterilization of Native American women in the USA

I want to change the overall tone of the article to sound more like an encyclopedia along with adding more citations to verify information that has been stated.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sterilization_of_Native_American_women

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mWAxZrzzQJ1OpVCeWpZNp2L08jVCRlfFrAg9bhRAkL4/edit?usp=sharing (where I am working)   — Preceding unsigned comment added by VicLis18 (talk • contribs) 06:25, 30 November 2018 (UTC)

The U.S. General Accounting Office found that the Indian Health Service sterilized 3,406 American Indian women between 1973 and 1976. The study showed that 36 women under age 21 were forcibly sterilized regardless of a court-ordered moratorium on sterilizations of women younger than 21.[3][4] One out of four Native American women were involuntarily sterilized through tubal ligation or hysterectomy.[5] The procedure was often done under the pretense of a check up or abortion and most individuals were not aware they had been sterilized. In the 1970s, the average birth rate of Native American women was 3.7 however, in 1980 it fell to 1.8.[6] (Original opening paragraph)

Sterilization was a procedure forced, through coercion or without consent, on Native American women within the United States in the late 1960s and early 1970's. During this time the Indian Health Service (IHS) used a variety of tactics to sterilize Native American women. These tactics included, failure to provide women with necessary information regarding sterilization; use of coercion to get signatures on the consent forms; improper consent forms; and lack of an appropriate waiting period (at least seventy-two hours) between the signing of a consent form and the surgical procedure

The IHS is a government organization that is still in use with in the USA. The government organization was a blend of various organizations created to combat specific health problems within Native American and Alaskan Natives; specifically the IHS was created in 1958.

Sterilization of Native American women was a procedure that began to surface in the late 1960s and early 1970s in the United States. Native American women were subject to involuntary surgical sterilization caused by a policy enacted by the federally funded Indian Health Service (IHS). The U.S. General Accounting Office found that the Indian Health Service sterilized 3,406 American Indian women between 1973 and 1976. The study showed that 36 women under age 21 were forcibly sterilized regardless of a court-ordered moratorium on sterilizations of women younger than 21. One out of four Native American women were involuntarily sterilized through tubal ligation or hysterectomy. The procedure was often done under the pretense of a check up or abortion and most individuals were not aware they had been sterilized. In the 1970s, the average birth rate of Native American women was 3.7 however, in 1980 it fell to 1.8.

Positive: your article is already divided into organized sections. Negative: The content in each section is very short. Improve: Try to add more sources. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jlopez4758 (talk • contribs) 01:13, 9 November 2018 (UTC)

Sterilization of Native American women Peer Review
I think it's great that you copied over the original article content in an effort to work around it! That seems to be the best way of tackling an already existing article. I will say, as someone who is also working on an article on sterilization (of Latinas), it is difficult to find sources and information that may be of use to you and that meets Wikipedia's standards. I encourage you to keep digging to see if you can possibly find more. I also suggest finding photos that may be of relevance to your article, since the existing version has no such thing. All in all, great work so far! Rlopez60 (talk) 02:57, 9 November 2018 (UTC)

Emma's Peer Review
First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? It seems as though your lead is very clear, concise, and neutral, although informative. I think your goal of making it more encyclopedia-like was successful. I think implementing that throughout the entire article will be difficult because there is so much history there, but so far you have a very solid foundation.

What changes would you suggest the author(s) apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? I would try to change the outline of the article, the way it is currently structured seems as though it could be omitting many essential details when it comes to sterilizations of Native Americans. What kind of sub-headings and headings do you think would be appropriate? What's the most important thing the author(s) could do to improve the article? Really focus on the structure of the article. I think once you have a solid idea of that, you can continue revising it so that it fits your liking. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! Personally, I am really struggling to find trustworthy sources for my article. I know topics like sterilization which most seem to bury or refuse to acknowledge can be difficult to find sources for but I would use the library databases to see what you can find! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Egonz124 (talk • contribs) 03:30, 9 November 2018 (UTC)

Haris' Peer review
This article was interesting because it showed how insane society can be with forced sterilizations and the obvious discrimnation against people of color. Movements such as these promote further causes for white superiority and make minorities feel they're genes are "unpure". — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2600:6C52:7A00:145E:0:5BC:2EAD:6465 (talk) 03:46, 9 November 2018 (UTC)