User talk:Victoria0998/sandbox

Wow. This is a fantastic amount of information to have this early and it's very well organized in a way that will fit in with the normal structure of Wikipedia very well. My only concerns here are with the tone you use to convey some of this information and some stylistic choices. Your tone is still objective, but it reads too much like a narrative at times when it should just be a presentation of facts. You also use pronouns very heavily throughout which can be confusing if you're hunting for a specific piece of information in the body of a paragraph. Look into ways to restructure your sentences so that the pronouns are unnecessary while still avoiding sounding repetitive, I understand this is easier said than done! - Nathan Glugla